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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
Then come to me... I wait for you with weary eyes You walk my way still in disguise I call to you a million times And with the breeze your words come back "Then come to me"...you softly whisper When night shall fall and all asleep The moon is watching the stars await We'll ride the heavens while hell does freeze Why rush me now? Just let me float To painless lands where lies a hope Where till the dawn I'll waltz with you And hand in hand all dressed in dreams The music plays and in your arms "Then come to me"...this time a voice Where sorrows vanish so far away Just lay your head and feel so light Feel the music close your eyes Then come to me...nightly asleep Where stars await...another Then come to me...then come to me... death. **************************************************** A note to all readers this is a hypothetical poem based on a story of a man who is ailing and wants to die . Please read me when i say it's not a suicide note. life's for living... **************************************************** < !signature--> If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao [This message has been edited by AVANTI (edited 06-24-2000).] |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
We cannot know of darkness unless we have the light to compare it to. Very good poem... I liked reading it..in fact I read it twice.. and it was even better the second time round. Linda M. |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
thanx linda... for reading and understanding... it means a lot that someone takes a second look... see you around If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
hey you  so glad your here... i love this one perfect imagery flows like a song ... wonderful writing in that unique Avanti style later-gator jm |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"Feel the music close your eyes Then come to me...nightly asleep Where stars await...another" You keep the reader floating through this poem, Avanti. Quite compelling and still, like a peaceful death might be. Very interestingly written. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Love this one, but you knew that. |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
absolutely poignant and vivid, this was an incredible piece of work. I am going to go look for more of your writings  ~Heather PS I almost (at first) thought it to be a love poem...silly me!!!!!! [This message has been edited by X Angel (edited 06-24-2000).] |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
thanx janet ,claire , munda and xangel I'm gald that you read this and will want to read more... It's the best i could ask for if someone reads then understands and encourages... thank you... If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Christopher J Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 94 |
Yes!...you have my vote, and another...your style is soooo good! I love your work!!! |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
thanx christopher... you've given me reason to smile If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Nicely written. Enjoyed your poem very much. |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Powerful work Avanti. Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
thanx mike and eric williams... for reading and taking the time to post I feel good...with all the words of encouragement If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
AVANTI~ YES!!! This is great and didn't sound like suicide to me....* vote* -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
thanx sea... for reading and glad you liked it If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
"And hand in hand all dressed in dreams" wonderful..excellently written, avanti! i cant believe this one had floated to the back page!! dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
thank you for bringing it back in... it's very close to me it means a lot when someone understands it If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao |
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