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Christopher J
since 2000-06-21
Posts 94

0 posted 2000-06-22 09:15 PM

Why is it that I should wonder
If I were a younger man would I understand
But I now have grown and
Things look different from where I stand
But when I look around
The world seems unchanged
Perhaps I am only a fool
Whose dreams have been exchanged
For reality

Why is it that I should be scared
For it is only the night
That brings darkness to light
And takes away the flight
Of the eagle as she flies
As I wind back the clock
To a time of innocence
When I was only a mere child
And I could sense
The changes

Indeed, the world is turning
And why should it be that I feel
Like I'm tied under the wheel
Of a secret that I couldn't conceal
Because I left somebody behind
Back in the last lifetime of mine
Her hair was golden and
Her did so boldly shine
In thoughts

As of younger days I reflect
When I am lying awake
Why is it that my body does ache
For the promises I failed to make
Seems to me a thought
Isn't worth a bag of gold
These people that pass by
Do they know of the old
Broken world

That passes through my eyes
Everyday that I think of me
And the person I wanted to be
But I grew and began to see
Through steely eyes of blue
The surrounds of my being
The riders and the derailments
Of all we were never seeing
In thoughts

Why is it that I should take
To learning by the text
Who knows what will happen next
The world seems a little vexed
Outside it is dreary today
And tomorrow may be the same
And if I'm still here
I'll look upon myself with shame
Knowing nothing

Of the revolution that appears
In the starry nights
As the city goes up in lights
And the kings and all their knights
Roam and crusade
As I watch from my bedroom
The world losing it's battle
Suffering in gloom
Until morning

And she will fight
Like I fought for a day
My feelings all but draining away
Into the depths of what I say
As sunshine opens up
To reveal the void in the moon
The thoughts of a boy
Will disappear soon
In thoughts

In thoughts
When I am sound alseep
When I close my eyes and weep
Fires burning away at my feet
Confusion is killing us - brings us to our knees
Starry galaxies will crumble
Into the lake of glassy perfection
Through mirrored rooms we stumble
In thoughts

© Copyright 2000 Christopher J - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-06-22 11:53 PM

god, this is beautiful...intense
excellent writing
take care, jm

X Angel
Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521
2 posted 2000-06-24 05:41 PM


that was some poem!

Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

3 posted 2000-06-24 09:12 PM

Very intense, Christopher. Well written!


Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)
4 posted 2000-06-24 10:14 PM

Wow Christopher this was deep and quite profound!!  I LOVED IT!!  It made me think about my own life!!  Nicely done!!

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Rex Allen McCoy
Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London
5 posted 2000-06-25 12:02 PM

this shows great talent
Bravo ...

Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
6 posted 2000-06-25 12:31 PM

very intense...
i liked it a lot...cause it leave me with a lot of thought and reflection...

If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

Christopher J
since 2000-06-21
Posts 94

7 posted 2000-06-25 01:16 AM

Thank you all for all your responses...i love you all lol...
Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462

8 posted 2000-06-26 01:00 PM

Well written.  Nice job.
Not A Poet
Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885
Oklahoma, USA
9 posted 2000-06-26 01:22 PM

Intense and profound are indeed appropriate adjectives. This poem has the feel of T.S. Eliot. Very well done, indeed.


Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
10 posted 2000-06-26 01:25 PM

This had some depth for sure...

Yes, intense and profound are the right words...

regards, sudhir.

Death, be not proud, though some have called thee,
Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so;

- John Donne

Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration
11 posted 2000-08-03 10:47 AM

Christopher (feel like I'm talking to myself... which I do, but usually not in fron tof other people... usually )

What a feel to this, I like the flow!

I wholeheartedly agree with:

But I now have grown and
Things look different from where I stand

But I have to (from a personal vp) disagree with:

But when I look around
The world seems unchanged

But that's just me!  

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