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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
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0 posted 2000-06-22 07:19 PM

I would Explain the Sky

There are so many big things
and yet I squint
and catch some small winking
just waiting for explanation.

I would explain the sky,
yet one small star holds me
and whispers of shadows
that stars make
on night sky’s dark plane
and the music in the void
that causes angels to weep,
they whisper of treasure
and to imagine an opening
where brilliance falls all around
like marbles gay and melting color.

There are so many dusty roads,
and one time I found
a dull stone
shaped like a heart,
not perfect but obvious,
and it enlightened me
and quenched my romance
in a perfect minute.

There are questions popping all around
like bubbles
the big hand blows sweet wind
wild wind, hot wind, treacherous wind,
and I lean into truth
as if I could see it there
with some enormous righteous intent
displaying obvious answers
invisible answers
that I have to walk around
and study with creased and pressed thought

sometimes simple is so complicated

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 06-23-2000).]

© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-06-22 07:37 PM

It defines you as the talent you are...
amazing, simply amazing

Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

2 posted 2000-06-22 07:57 PM

Martie, indeed, sometimes simple is just that... and this is beautifully put, my friend.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

JOY 14
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since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
3 posted 2000-06-22 08:03 PM

Oh, I really like this style.  Wonderful work!  

< !signature-->

Gather ye rosebuds while ye may,
Old time is still a-flying,
And this same flower that smiles today
To-morrow will be dying.

-Robert Herrick

[This message has been edited by JOY 14 (edited 06-22-2000).]

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Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores
4 posted 2000-06-22 08:11 PM

You are just something else !  
What a talent you possess ...
I'm just sitting here shaking my head
and giggling softly ...
Yep !  You are something else !
AMAZING you are.
Love you~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~

Christopher J
since 2000-06-21
Posts 94

5 posted 2000-06-22 09:22 PM

Do you have any books?  wonderful, wonderful...i have a thing for beautiful endings, and yours is one of the best I've read so far!
Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
6 posted 2000-06-22 10:02 PM

One of my favorite poems of all time from any poet in history.
It is truly great, Martie and should be in the book

Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
7 posted 2000-06-23 06:57 PM

Janet Marie--you say the nicest things.

Claire--thank you sweet lady.

Joy--Im so glad you liked this.

Marge--you are the amazing one!

Christopher--A book....I wish...sigh!  I have a thing for endings too...thanks for such a wonderful compliment!

Liz--You always make me feel so are the best!!

Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

8 posted 2000-06-23 09:51 PM

It seems so hard for me to pick a favorite of yours, Martie, they are all so beautiful!


Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA
9 posted 2000-06-23 09:58 PM

I'll stuff the ballot box to get this one in!!  
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
10 posted 2000-06-24 09:37 PM

Denise--thank you for always being there with such gracious replies.

Deer--start stuffing!

Yu Lan
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since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462
New Zealand
11 posted 2000-06-24 09:52 PM

An enchanting name, and an enchanting poem.. ^_^


"He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu

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since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462

12 posted 2000-06-25 11:28 AM

exceptional as always Martie... wonderful poetry.
X Angel
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since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521
13 posted 2000-06-27 03:26 PM

this was beautiful...

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
14 posted 2000-06-27 04:18 PM

Martie... your verse is always so exceptional in it's flow and pace and imagery. this is a wonderful piece. I can't wait to see it in print.
since 1999-11-12
Posts 64
La La Land
15 posted 2000-07-02 03:51 AM

I like this. It is alive with image.

Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
16 posted 2000-07-02 07:23 AM

This is a great piece of work...very well written and a lovely read

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

17 posted 2000-07-03 01:58 AM

OK Martie - that's're coming with me and we're writing poetry together...ok?????

Please don't


Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167
state of confusion
18 posted 2000-07-03 11:27 AM

So very talented you are, Martie.  Any poem of yours would get my vote, which means you should publish all your work for our enjoyment!


Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
19 posted 2000-07-03 12:04 PM

Yu Lan--you are the one with enchantment in your name...thank you for liking my poem.

Mike--Thanks for the exceptional reply.

X Angel--a sigh is a wonderful compliment.

Doreen--I admire your writing and look forward to seeing it in print.

Rindercella--thank you for such a nice reply.

Tracie--I'm so glad you liked it.

Kamla--I'd love to go with you, cause I think you are going somewhere!!

Corinne--You write so beautifully, I'm so glad you like the way I write.

Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

20 posted 2000-07-08 08:35 AM

I'm serious - I would actually love to write a poem with you Martie...

and I didn't mention the first time how very much I adore the title of this one...


Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637
21 posted 2000-07-15 03:27 PM

Hi Martie,

WOW, Im at a loss for words, any thing I could possiably come up with could not do this work of ART justice. WOW as Marge did shaking head in amazement!!!!!

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)

Geoffrey Sonnen
since 2000-07-05
Posts 142
Reading, PA USA
22 posted 2000-07-15 05:57 PM

I had to get up and walk around this insightful offering twice before I responded. This is just so beautiful and thought provoking. The majesty of simple True and inspiring ! Hope you don't mind that again I must share your Heart's musings with others. Beautiful !

                  My Best,  Geoffrey

Dark Angel
Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

23 posted 2000-07-16 02:03 AM

Oh Martie, I remember this beauty back in open and how it took my breath away... It has done just that again... You are truly an amazing poet hon.


Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
24 posted 2000-07-16 10:54 PM

Kamla--you know I'm waiting

Cerenity--Wow is a wonderful thing to say!

Geoffrey--I am overwhelmed by your response to this poem...and of course I don't mind that you share it---that is a truly wonderful compliment!

Dark Angel--thanks for the sweet words and the vote

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