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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Tell me Father what you hear When you close your ears Tell me Father what you see When at night you dream Some say we dream in black and white I believe in color So tell me please, my Father-Hero What transpired those misplaced days Can you see the rocket's red glare Bombs bursting in air The sulferous smell The death of the fair Do the carbines rattle your brain Do you still feel the bullet Blowing your knee to smithereens Do you still feel the bullet Breaking your teeth Splitting your cheeks How many friends did you lose What were their names Are they in the National Cemetary Tell me, were the lost memories Worth the years lost in Korea The jungles of Vietnam What pain do you hide in your soul And why did you hide your medals Alicat, the Persnikitty As I sit here dimly thinking Watching modem lights a-blinking Churning out poetic hash. Lord, in all Your piety, Help me keep my sanity: Please don't let the modem crash! --Alicat |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
This was really sad....great piece of work *hugs* ~Heather |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Sad piece, but I like it!!!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Being of this era, I felt this especially hard. Thank you for a splendid read. |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Ali, let's just say this poem made me feel! Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Excellent writing Alicat ! |
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Esmeralda Ponsonby Member
since 2000-04-02
Posts 138 |
What deep seated emotions you express in this poem, how many other's who have fought the battles hide because it's just to darn painful? Excellent writing here. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i'm sure glad i found this alicat .. superb writing |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I see the color blue written throughout this. Kathleen |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Ali you sure packed a lot of emotion in this one! Excellent m'friend! |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Overflows with emotion and so true. Liked it much. Pete |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is very moving Alicat, Great writing |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
sad but well written... sad is beautiful too If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Excellent writing... very thought-provoking and poignant line of questioning... Alicat, just wanted you to know that this one moved me a lot really, regards, sudhir |
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