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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2000-06-21 05:14 AM

(He said it.)
Deep within--
a power failure
of my soul.
(He did it.)
Did it once again.
Instantly, I'm withered, old...
(He broke it.)
So it might stay the same...
chards of love remain.
(He's sorry.)
As he always is...
Cupid's arrow missed.

I heave no sob,
whimper no weep...
silent river,
down my cheeks.
So common now,
that I forget,
and wonder why
my face is wet.

© Copyright 2000 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
X Angel
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1 posted 2000-06-21 01:31 PM

neat format, I liked this Serenity (and I love yer pen name....)

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2 posted 2000-06-21 02:42 PM

Loved it, yet it makes me sad!!  

Very nice!!

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

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Purgatorial Incarceration
3 posted 2000-06-21 05:10 PM

Sigh, sad... but you. Smile seren'.
Dawn Eclipse
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The Horsehead Nebula
4 posted 2000-06-21 08:37 PM

Wow!  What a wonderful poem, yet so  sad.. I like your format as well.  Wonderful job.

"Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying."
Harry Anderson, "Night Court"

*Cassandra Roseen*

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5 posted 2000-06-21 08:54 PM

I'm fifth here too serenity!!!

Beautiful. .. . just love it. . .


That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

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6 posted 2000-06-21 09:07 PM

Melancholy and beautiful, serenity. YES!
Janet Marie
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7 posted 2000-06-21 09:33 PM

I was hoping you would submit this one...
yep yep...
needs to be there  
winkie winkie

Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
8 posted 2000-06-22 01:09 AM

This is very nicely done
very deserving of a page in time

linda munday
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9 posted 2000-06-22 05:36 AM

Serenity, I really liked this.  Actually I voted for it...need I say more.
Linda M.

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Florida's Foreverly Shores
10 posted 2000-06-22 07:23 AM

The beauty that is you ...

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~

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11 posted 2000-06-22 09:23 AM

Sad, well written, wonderful  


"We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka.

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Hammond, La USA
12 posted 2000-06-23 12:04 PM

Very sad Serenity.
The tears are shared as you have brought them to my eyes also.
Very nice poem.

serenity blaze
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13 posted 2000-06-23 08:06 AM

crying again, just in awe at the kindness of everyone here...(geez, I'm a mess...gotta get these hormones checked...)

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14 posted 2000-06-23 10:50 AM

serenity, very nicely done. Loved it. Must be in the hormones...  
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Purgatorial Incarceration
15 posted 2000-06-30 03:50 PM


Member Rara Avis
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16 posted 2000-07-04 12:32 PM

This was most excellent! I'm sure so many can relate to this one, me included! I'm glad I got to see this one!
serenity blaze
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17 posted 2000-07-20 09:23 PM

Thanks to Parker and Dovie, it is much appreciated...oh...and Chris...for the bump!!!  MOST appreciated.
Heather Miller
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Bryan, Ohio USA
18 posted 2000-07-20 10:26 PM

It touched me much!!!!!!!

With God all things are possible.

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19 posted 2000-07-20 10:41 PM

So sad, yet so very well written, this is so heartfelt.  Love it.  Bonnie
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20 posted 2000-07-21 12:07 PM

very different style...
great work

If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

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since 2000-07-22
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midwest usa
21 posted 2000-08-06 09:58 PM

oh wow
when you do (this)
i dont know if i've seen that done before
it makes the poem
another one for my library file
so sad but still so cool

Member Seraphic
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22 posted 2000-08-06 10:02 PM

This is excellently done, Serenity! I'm sorry, I thought I had already voted for this. Well, I'll just have to do it now!


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