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Love's Champion |
Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Snorting stamping straining eager for battle dappled, mail clad, charger thunders into view in clouds of billowing steam spurred on by master's passion rearing turning awaiting battle. He pauses grudgingly tense from rider's fire shaking snowy head awaiting battle. Sir Knight suited in plates of steel cloaked in whitest silk surcoat holding ivory shield, emblazoned with gilt wings of an Angel dips his lance to flame haired princess receiving her token freely given then smiles as he spurs his mount onwards awaiting battle. Black Knave armored in trickery shielded by cunning words rides slowly forward awaiting battle? The Champion chuckling softly turns his back disdainfully returning to his love's side and says softly, "MY Lady I need not soil my lance with his foul blood for the battle for thy heart was won long ago. But know thee now shouldst need arise I, servant and champion am here awaiting battle." "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
I could feel this one Eric. Nice 'VOTED' Jon |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Eric, loved it before, love it again. Very vivid, I was there. Parker |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Loved this first time around Eric and loved the second read even more ... wonderful! Best wishes, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 06-21-2000).] |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
An ageless story which applies just as well today and surely tomorrow too. Thanks. Pete |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Eric, lucky lady indeed that inspires such devotion in you. Kudos on a poetical masterpiece, this would be an incredible addition to the VotW book, good luck ~Heather |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wonderful! I love this kind of writing. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Perhaps we should have a whole section devoted to "Knights and Damsels" poetry!!! Great one Eric. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
wonderful story telling perfect imagery jm |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Loved it in Open....love it for the book. In order to keep a true perspective of one's importance, everyone should have a dog that will worship him and a cat that will ignore him. |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Reply time again Jon, making people feel something is what poetry is all about for me, thankyou! Parker, were you the guy in the rather fetching steel armour with the brass epaulets, second from the right? I'm glad the imagery transported you. Kit, thankyou Tis always my pleasure when my poetry brings joy to others. Thanks Pete, it's nice to know there are others who still see the relevance of chivalry in the modern world hehehe Thankyou Heather, you've got me blushing I don't know about a lucky lady... you need to ask her, but I can certainly tell you she is a lovely lady! Sharon, GOOD I think you're right Sven, though a truce may need to be declared in the printing room or it could get ugly Janet Marie said "perfect imagery"! *happy jumpy bouncy smiles!* Good man 'Deer Thankyou all. I remain your loyal servant, Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Well, sorry everyone but I'm blatantly bumping this to the top cuz I got lots more replies in open poetry *shrug* Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Shining Knight! Voted |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Glad you bumped it up, my friend. If you hadn't, I would have never read this beautiful piece. And more importantly, I would have never voted for it! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very vivid work....great poem I can relate to this........voting.. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Eric, I am usually in Dark Passions, glad I stopped over. This is my kind of poem, I love the medievel theme. Recently did 2 along similar lines myself.Hope to read more from you. Catalinamoon |
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