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A Poets Death
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A Poets Death |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
When this pen becomes a prison When these words no pleasure bring Thats when this soul lies empty Thats when deaths warm welcome rings. When this heart is no longer able To see the unicorns frisk on high Or feel the shimmer of soft water Or see butterflies stain glass the sky. Thats when this voice will falter Thats when sweet words will cease And passions place will fade away As this poets soul seeks peace. Nevermore to make you wonder Nevermore to make you smile With laughing words and silvered teardrops That you've looked for all the while. So I'll take your memories with me A little tarnished but precious still As silence fades my thoughts from memory And fades my life from broken quill |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
woah the title got me in and the read was stupid n duss no no stupendous!! love it i do |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
When this heart is no longer able To see the unicorns frisk on high Or feel the shimmer of soft water Or see butterflies stain glass the sky. Thats when this voice will falter Thats when sweet words will cease And passions place will fade away As this poets soul seeks peace. Nevermore to make you wonder Nevermore to make you smile With laughing words and silvered teardrops That you've looked for all the while. So I'll take your memories with me A little tarnished but precious still As silence fades my thoughts from memory And fades my life from broken quill ============================ Paula this is outstanding work...truely easily your best poem to date... very cool poem here... "Poe"-ish and a touch of "Shakes" that "butterfly stain glass sky" line is pure poetry and your rhyme is perfect.. very well written indeed. take care jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
When this readers screen shows nothing with paula by I shall be saddened and may just start to cry |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
It would seem that my first reply has disappeared into cyberspace again. Great work Paula! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Paula..... This is a beautiful piece of poetry. I hope and pray that you never take your thoughts and words from us here. We need you!! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paula~ A neat render. Old poets never die ... they just go into cardiambic arrest !  And they just keep on pentametering along !  Oh ... there's lots more where those came from !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Walt...glad the title brought you in...stupid n duss??? thanks dude. JM...you honor me kind lady Jamie...your sweet reply has tears running down my cheeks EagleOne...first last anywhere in between your words are always a gift to me...thank you Sunny1...you never know what tomorrow brings...so who can promise they will always be here? but for now this is where I want to be. Marge...LMAO...keep em coming girl...thanks |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Paula...I really enjoyed this one |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
hoot_owl_rn...thank you |
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cathybohannan Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 140Paintsville,KY |
Paula, what a lovely heart felt poem, you have a great talent. Cathy Marie Bohannan |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
When this heart is no longer able To see the unicorns frisk on high Or feel the shimmer of soft water Or see butterflies stain glass the sky. -------------- Wonderful imagery Paula. Just keep them coming. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Cathy...thank you for the lovely compliment Eloise...your praise means a lot to me thank you. |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Great piece you've written here Paula. Your words were exactly on point too. You know, I have a poem very similiar to this and it's called The death of a poet's pen and it's about me being no longer able to write poetry...it's sad and powerful at the same time and it's also one of my best poems too. Anyways, thanks for sharing this masterpiece! Nathan |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow no kidding......stupendous is right...I am sitting here reading a boring IT plan, and I have left this up on the screen to go back to and reread......just cause it is such a wonderful escape of the mind....great writing....you speak for more of us poets here than you know |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
By far your best yet. You are growing in your poetry well. |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
triumphant piece, Paula ... a piece for all poets ... well said and simply one of your best |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Nathan...I would love to read your poem sometime...and thanks...masterpiece? I'm not sure I would go that far LOL Corazon...well I only try to speak for myself but its nice to know my thoughts echo others...thank you for reading Mark...well you know I only believe in going forward LOL...you learn you grow...thanks for stopping by LOL and MARK...this one really took me by the heart...wouldnt let go till it was complete...so it is a triumph...and I'm glad you think it one of my best |
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jfilius Junior Member
since 2000-08-14
Posts 29 |
May your pen never become your prison! You have captured it and control it so well! This one I would expect to see on one of those beutiful stained glass plaques in a frame at a fancy gift store! This is realy great work! John |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Loved this poem. It's crescendo's sent me soaring and the imagery left me breathless. Bravo! Well done. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Paula* Seems that my quick stops in and out of Passions has caused me to miss this gem...excellent work....stunning images and heartfelt message...Bravo!! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I'm slow getting here - but not too late - I MUST add my compliments - on a poetic masterpiece Paula - you've outdone yourself - I'm proud to be allowed to post with you. |
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Oh my Paula a simply outstanding piece of work, beautiful through and through. Bonnie |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Paula, This is definitely one of your best works yet... really fantastic... regards, sudhir |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
John...what a lovely compliment thank you Kethry...Glad I could set you flying thanks Holly...I am so glad you found me...I treasure your words and your thoughts...thank you Wil...The honor is mine sir...and slow is NOT a bad thing LOL Bonnie...I thank you kind lady for your sweet words Sudhir...as always it is a pleasure and an honor to have you read my words thank you |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Paula, This is incredible...very beautiful. I hope your words will always be here at Passions to warm us all. Mchael |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Michael thank you so very much |
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