»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #9
»
automatic rewind
| Open Poetry #9 |
|
automatic rewind |
|
|
T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186
|
when you left here i surrendered my mind to a place in time it must've froze man i can't remember the last time you weren't on my mind but my memory is decomposing either that or i'm goin' blind i see your face right here before me i try to focus on your eyes ...but the image fogs you blur and fade away... - chorus - can't get you off of my mind i swear i'm frozen in time somethings wrong with my mind my memory must've been re-aligned cause every thought i have leads back to you reality re-defined and jammed on automatic rewind it keeps you here by my side addicted to that place in time and all my thoughts inject a random fix of you can't get you off of my mind i play you back and rewind to keep you here by my side so i can gaze into your eyes ...until the image fogs and blurs and fades away... < !signature--> - time grabs you by the wrist directs you where to go so make the best of this test and don't ask why it's not a question but a lesson learned in time [This message has been edited by T McCoy (edited 08-01-2000).] |
||
| © Copyright 2000 a m mccoy - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You ALWAYS make music in my mind never say never |
||
|
T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
...ALWAYS huh?....you keep telling me things like that and there won't be enough room here for my ego..! THANKS!  Tony |
||
|
Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I want to hear this one put to music ... nicely done |
||
|
Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Perfect words to be placed to music Tony! Nicely penned! Best wishes, /Kit |
||
|
T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
a big thanks to you both!- time grabs you by the wrist directs you where to go so make the best of this test and don't ask why it's not a question but a lesson learned in time |
||
|
poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
i agree with them above! this IS great....very easy to fall into! |
||
|
JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Wow Tony.....You have such talent for wiritng songs...maybe we could get chat and write one together....By the way nice to finally put a face with the name.....  Julie :) |
||
|
Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This would climb the charts in my book! Great writing Tony~ |
||
|
T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
- sincere thanks to everyone - if you could all just have eveyone you know send me dollar...LOL Julie...yea that might be pretty cool! It would be a pretty interesting song i think... Tony |
||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Tony this is excellent..such depth of emotion... very well written... this is the first work of yours Ive read I believe..sorry, so many new poets of late its getting hard to keep up. but i will look for your work in the future. very cool song..perfect title.. a belated welcome to passions from me take care jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
||
|
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Is there more of this? Do you play? you might not know this but JM and I are back up singers (YES WE ARE--jm--hush!!) and I have some experience as a booking agent--what instrument do you play? We are ready to rock with this one. |
||
|
Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~This was absolutely thrilling. I loved it!!~ |
||
|
T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
jm...thanks for the kind words and the welcome... serenity...hmmm...i can hold the rhythm on bass...drums are pure FUN...but i pretend to sing! yea, this is all of it; first verse just gets repeated...i think the repitition adds to the whole "rewind" thing. you? sincere thanks serenity, as always... beth...thank you...i haven't seen your name out there yet, but i'll be on the lookout... Tony |
||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
LOL at sen' saying I can sing.. serenity can sing Tony... I hear shes a legend down on the French Quarter my little Mardi Gras songbird. if i sing YOU ALL are gonna need backup LOL but I have always wanted to be a groupie.. perhaps I can be the official guitar pic person LOL ( i gotta watch me twin sen' every minute) shes always volunteering me for something later-poet-gators im going to bed jm |
||
|
ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I like that - image fogs - part at the end. These are great lyrics...ballad I think ......good hook good title...feels to me like minor key or major seventh.....maybe minor and major mix-up in the chorus. |
||
|
T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
jm...geez girl, we're already booked at the viper room...blame serenity LOL ethome...i tell ya brother i do good to find any words...what you said...hmmmmm.....can ya send me the tab for that? thanks to you both! Tony |
||
|
tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Tony~ Wonderful job with this...very enjoyable indeed Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
||
|
T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
thanks for the kind reply Tracie... glad you enjoyed it... Tony |
||
|
Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
You have got my attention. OK, now I am singing and let me tell ya, singing is not my strong point...lol Enjoyed this..Thank you. Jenn E |
||
|
poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Oh geeze...Those two singing? ROFLMAO Take it from me sir....uh....are they listening? hehehe (ducking down behind monitor) **shaking head furiously!** Although Janet does write some good country lyrics - I'm not sure you look like country though! This was really good, I'm still trying to put my finger on the style this reminds me of. GO LEAFS!  "Fantasies enrich our lives to the fullest, but true satisfaction comes from creating your own story in the real world! Live out your fantasies & mak |
||
|
SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Hey there,...the title definately kix here. This poem/song is flowing with realism,...just so able to see it all. T...this part here..."all my thoughts inject a random fix of you",....that is so right on! So what happens. Ouch! Awesome work. Take care. *Peace. |
||
|
Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
Where you been I miss your poetry.....o BTW my old screen name is JulieAnn this is my new one.... ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
||
|
effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Good writing, enjoyed reading it.. |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
