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JnR4eva
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since 2000-08-07
Posts 377
Bronx, NY

0 posted 2000-08-13 02:30 AM


I wrote this poem as an initial reaction to an event and it is purely from a heart which is hurt and confused.  For a couple of days me and my boyfriend have not seen eachother...and well, you may read on...

What am I to do?

on the world wide net, I am left alone
sleep deprived am I
with my love at his home
many miles away
my cries turn into moans
a feeling of emptiness...a feeling of alone
but of the the little time we have, now has gotten small
I wish upon a star for nothing but a call
it is a fact that the mind comprehends
explain it to the heart which yearns and begs
a little more time, for just one night
an exclusion for us, no friends for tonight
a paradise sweet for both you and I
but as many nights pass, sleep as I cry



"my love is my motivation
my love is my inspiration
perception of this poem
is your interpretation"
-- me

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Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
1 posted 2000-08-13 02:38 AM


"explain it to the heart which yearns and begs"...how this hurts
JnR4eva
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since 2000-08-07
Posts 377
Bronx, NY
2 posted 2000-08-13 01:44 PM


Thank you paula for your support  

"my love is my motivation
my love is my inspiration
perception of this poem
is your interpretation"
-- me

BreyerRose
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since 2000-08-12
Posts 55
Easton, Pa USA
3 posted 2000-08-13 05:06 PM


Did I read somewhere that this is your first poem?  No way!  It was great.  By the way, I love your signature.  How true those words are.

Hugs and Kisses,
Paula


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By the sea
4 posted 2000-08-13 05:29 PM


I wish you my best.

Michael





Steve B
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since 2000-08-07
Posts 140
Southern PA
5 posted 2000-08-13 07:44 PM


J~ I can only share your pain, this pain I
    know so well... I know of no words to
    help, only to console...your well
    expressed feelings..Steve B.

JnR4eva
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since 2000-08-07
Posts 377
Bronx, NY
6 posted 2000-08-13 11:02 PM


to BreyerRose...
thank you for your words and you know I was thinking that it[my quote] was a bit tacky..but I said to myself that I would prefer to have my own saying..even though it probably isn't the greatest lol ..thank you once again  

to auguste...
thank you for your wish, I appreciate that very much  

to steve B...
thank you for your kind words I appreciate them very much  


"my love is my motivation
my love is my inspiration
perception of this poem
is your interpretation"
-- me

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
7 posted 2000-08-13 11:12 PM


You've really captured the mood of a lover yearning for the one they love.....very well done..I could could feel it....WELCOME!
Nate Dogg
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since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton
8 posted 2000-08-14 12:29 PM


JNR4, you've expressed the feeling of loneliness very well and I hope that your lover wakes-up and gives you a call or something. Good piece and thanks for sharing!

Nathan

JnR4eva
Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377
Bronx, NY
9 posted 2000-08-15 01:43 AM


to ethome....
thank you for your kind words they mean alot to me  

to nate dogg..
I couldnt help but laugh when u said that this person better call ...LOL i'm still laughing now..thank you for your kind words you have made me laugh  


"my love is my motivation
my love is my inspiration
perception of this poem
is your interpretation"
-- me

StarPryncess17
Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
10 posted 2000-08-25 03:40 PM


Such emotions here JnR4! I'm so sorry to hear of this pain you must endure! I only wish there was some way to console your hurt...all I can say is I'm here if u ever need... You were right! there are some parallels here.
~*~Jessica~*~


~*~Why is it that love always
starts with a HuG
grows with a kIsS
and ends with a TeAr?!?~*~

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
11 posted 2000-08-25 03:52 PM


Reminds me of all the times I was patiently and hopefully waiting for a certain call...
and wondering why I just couldn't bring myself to be the one that called first.
Fearing that she would say I was bothering her and yet if she called everything would be alright..feelings of insecurity...perhaps she doesn't care for me after all...but if she would just call maybe she does care...James

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