Open Poetry #9 |
Time |
Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
The years pass by uncounted but the minutes I know by name each second since I’ve loved you no measurement is the same The time it took to make a star means naught to me you see for in that star I find the love that I wish you had for me We’ve subdued the jungle beasts but my heart will not be tamed I’ll not hold back a nanosecond and thus said, I feel ashamed This love took not a moment to find a home within my heart I do not know when it will end nor am I sure when it did start The clock held within my heart doesn’t count time in normal space it’s measured in the times I’m held within your loving embrace [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 08-11-2000).] |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is so tender, Sharon. Very lovely! Denise |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Keeping the past as a time-piece enslaves those who would keep it wound each named minute will never cease until in loves arms we are found You always put such feeling in your poems. Wonderful as always. jamie |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Ths is wonderful Sharon, sch beautiful sentiments. loved it! |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
What a picture of undefined love! Beautiful! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Nice writing deVine. The end was just perfect. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
"The years pass by uncounted but the minutes I know by name each second since I've loved you no measurement is the same" Great lines and an equally great poem, my friend. Excellent! Michael |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Oooooh! I like this one much I do! What a love you describe! But a one sided one sucks! The stars shall shine at night Forever they shall be Someday you will find your love Just trust me, you shall see Don't make sense does it? Oh well! In the head and down on (paper?) |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
As some indication of how I feel about this poem - JMHO - it belongs in a published anthology at the very least, and more than that- like growing tendrils it grabbed my heart |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Now this is a sweet love beyond reproach. You have penned a preface to the worlds manual of pure love for the eternal at heart. Loved it in style and flow. Superb. |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Hey..thanks so much for your kinds words.. I think I posted this before but tweaked it this time...again, thank you! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
This time, I like it. . . even better. . . Just wonderful deVine. . . ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Very beautiful, Sharon! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Beautiful poem and timeless in it's ability to reach out and grab you. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
This one is a keeper. Very lovely poem, Sharon. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
looking back upon the good times ... we certainly can measure time with an embrace ... or a ... whatever |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
PDV, this one you've penned reaches the heart and touches the soul An embrace you do so well 'devine Poet' Ciao =) Coco =) |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I wish I had a clock like yours |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Time is so precious and so is this lovely poem Liz |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
When Cupid's arrow dipped in deep love penetrates the heart it is so darn hard to get it back out...remarkable portrayal of the depth of love that can hold one forever or so it seems...great work! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Simply Devine |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh, the best of times, indeed... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
okay so i was curiuos what a poem named time was going to sound like from you, and i grateful for my curiosity, for i am here in this place you have mapped as time, and i loved your words with all my heart thank you. Kindly, Redheart Angrybraids |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Ms. Poet, your poem is lovely...and its theme rather reminds me of "Time In a Bottle." ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
so lovely and so beautiful. Kathleen |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I admire anyone who can get "nanosecond" into a poem! LOL! I love to see this side of you, deVine one. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Well, they said it all... Lovely work... regards, sudhir |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
I agree, Mike. Good thing Ms. DeVine ain't country to the core, elsewise it'd be nannersekens. DeVine One, I gotta say I really enjoyed your definition of Time. Would that I could measure intervals that way. Alicat |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Lady deVine... I've felt these lines a time or two. Well written m'lady... I bow to you and yours. |
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