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if i could trade places
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if i could trade places |
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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186
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she blesses my days with her words and her ways offering me some sanity too strong for her own good she grinds out the days kissing everyone's reality she's taught me a lesson in strength seeing what she can endure her soul still maintains it's integrity how does she stay so pure? she tells of her life i glimpse into her soul and it tears me to pieces to see the pain that it holds and to hear of it here when i'm so far away and have nothing to offer but an ear and dismay that life can do that to someone so pure and yet she smiles right through more than she should have to endure i wish i could trade places not with her though and not even with him but with one of his friends and just for a few days i'd give her her life back again... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This brings forth many thoughts...one is your compassion... well done, Mr. T. Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I see so much in this, well barely cause you moved me to tears again, how will I ever get those wings  ...above it all your heart and soul shine through every word. Sometimes just knowing someone cares is enough, I know this is one of those times. Writing from your heart...there is nothing more beautiful than that Tony~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
i wish i could trade places not with her though and not even with him but with one of his friends and just for a few days i'd give her her life back again... ================= you just need to be kissed for the sincerity and sentiments of this lil gem Im sure I could get a line formed REAL quick like JUST KIDDING LOL very sweet poem Tony... your hearts in the right place... which must mean your a poet and i gotta tell ya the last last lines of this... their "implications" are just so very cool... "and not even with him but with one of his friends" yep...WAY COOL later-T-gator jm |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
This shows your heart as you have been told and the sincerity of your plea is a tender loving one to say the least. I agree with Jm...the implications of the last lines are so very cool indeed. |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Tony, Awww.. this is my favorite on yet. I can see your love and longing shine through you beautiful words. I honestly love it  It was so touching. She is a lucky woman.rosepetals |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Oh my goodness, this one you've penned brought about a heartfelt tear. You've put in words such beauty of heart so pure .. this one poem is a gem! =) Coco =) |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Ohhhhh my oh my oh my Tony....... You have stunned me to say the least......I sit here and try to think of what to say and there is so much. You tender, loving heart radiates through. Right through me...this touched me so. One should be so lucky to have someone so kind in their life, who values them so, who you speak of is very lucky indeed. You gotz da tenderness goin on my friend!!! Till Later Tender Tony....... Jenn E |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
you've certainly poured your heart into this one well done Tony |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
and just for a few days i'd give her her life back again... wonderful Tony ..I enjoyed ~~softly smiling Maureen |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Tony...you will be with her soon...she knows how hard you are trying and how much you want to be with her...I wish I could help |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
The depth of care poured from your pen. Often times we can't help someone who's in a bad situation, they must at long last do it themselves, for themselves. Peace. corinne |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
well written. Excellent poetry. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I was adding this to my library...but I can't unless I reply again so I guess I'll have to tell ya I like it...again. My favorite part you ask....... i wish i could trade places not with her though and not even with him but with one of his friends Trading places not with your friend to take her place...not with your friend's husband/boyfriend...with a friend so you can be close to her and give her your support...very cool Tony~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
TMcCoy~ This is a tender and compassionate look into the heart of a real man. I certainly enjoyed your thoughts. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
well I see I have missed a couple of your posts....and boy was I missing out!!!! well all I can say is ditto...they have already said it all and well I have already told you how much I like your writing.....aaaahhhh it is going to be another long night.... Julie :) |
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