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Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2000-08-11 10:34 AM

Drizzle in the night,
Rain falling in mists so slight,
Hiding all the starlight,
Except for in your eyes.
Drizzles carry on,
The moon could well be gone,
Carried still within our song,
And the melody still flies.
Raindrops falling down,
A crescent moon in your frown,
Eyes cast toward the ground,
As words reach to you;
Sorry starry night,
Shines without its light,
Burning hiding from sight,
There’s nothing we can do.

Then she goes,
Wondering off into gray,
In the night,
From his sight,
Knowing words he could not say
While near her,
Feeling fear
As it binds his heart tightly,
Vital part,
Aching heart,
Emotions burning brightly.
There she goes,
Leaving him with just the gray.

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

1 posted 2000-08-11 10:41 AM

Prof. Gloom...
              Maybe the rain will stop, and
              he'll get a second chance to
              say what he needs to say.....
                     Maybe not....
              Anyway, I felt this one, and
              appreciated your fine writing!

Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

2 posted 2000-08-11 10:57 AM

Thank you, Sunny1,
I am glad you enjoy my words.

Gloom

redheart angrybraids
Member

since 2000-04-16

Posts 410
honolulu, hawaii

3 posted 2000-08-11 12:13 PM

"a cresent moon in your frown"
how lovely, yes the king of gloom, but so sweetly you are. i love the way you used the words in this poem.

Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

4 posted 2000-08-11 12:59 PM

Thank you, redheart angrybraids,
I just mix all the word I know up,
and sift them through my emotions onto the page,
glad you can enjoy them.

Gloom

Meadowmuse
Member Elite

since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

5 posted 2000-08-11 09:17 PM

"Hiding all the starlight,
Except for in your eyes."

Ah, this was a nice touch. Somber, sad, beautiful...I'm enjoying your work.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

6 posted 2000-08-12 06:47 AM

Thank you, Meadowmuse,
Somber, sad, beautiful, you say,
short descriptives are the most meaningful,
your comments are pleasing to read.
Thank you, Claire for them.

tracie66
Member Elite

since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

7 posted 2000-08-12 07:26 AM

Oh so grey a picture you have portrayed prof gloom....such a well written piece well done.
Tracie~

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

8 posted 2004-09-18 03:53 PM

Professor,

  Easily, I could have copied your entire poem.  It's gorgeous...  This brought back memories of a visit to the Metropolitan, where I viewed the painting under glass.  Somehow, it lost something in the transition of historical preservation.  Still I remember it well.

"As words reach to you;
Sorry starry night,
Shines without its light,
Burning hiding from sight,
There’s nothing we can do."

  from the keyboard of MisC:

Sorry starry night,
Swirls of passioned breath;
Inertia spun bright,
Strokes softened beneath
History's plate of glass...

             ~miscellanea~

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