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Afterlust
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grandiloquent Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 104Midwest America |
Afterlust daybreak hinting around the skylight CDs blasting serene melodies feeling giddy in the Morningafter as the cold arranges what I think cozy-shimmy down in my four-poster empty now except for me dozy with your taste in my mouth & the exquisite commotion that you leave shadowprints my body over, waning warm spots in my bed must leave the covers the way they tangled when, with watch advice, you shyly fled mind slipping easy with the flu of you fever burning up my eyes and lips and fingertips dizzy stars around my head -- me sinking in my stupid grin vain attempts to sleep to dream about you as I giggle and push the pillow in |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I am speechless with admiration of your work (really) ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Ooh Yeah,...Right on! I like this style of writing,...this sort of bare and out there and totally captivating way about it. You word so well a tale of your time,...your poetic verses speak out. Well, well written piece here,...on my way to look for more of you. Take it easy now. *Peace. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent Grandiloquent! Such a smooth read from thought to wonderful thought ... I could picture this scene perfectly as she flitted about in afterglow, wonderful!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
I love it!great lines in here......  ~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a sincere apology and some decent poetry ~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
grandiloquent--the way you write is so sure and naturally alluring...made me smile...Beautifully done! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
grandiloquent, it was grand and it was eloquent, with vivid imagery to boot. I loved it Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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grandiloquent Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 104Midwest America |
Billy, you keep me grounded when silly fear/impatience wind into my doubts. Thank you for your persistance and generous compliments. SpitFire, *grins* Well, I guess that means you liked it And you're going to do further research? woohoo!Kit, Thank You. Hmm, sounds like it would've been a lovely experience to have sorted through your mind as you read this. With that sort of mind's eye, I'd love to see your interpretation of a similiar scenario... do you have anything posted I can seek out? doreen, Word from you is such high praise... gollygoshgeesthanks *blushes* Martie, Wow, this went all the way to your lips? I'll take that as a compliment. Thank you for reading! Kethry, I can hardly come up with a reply quite so flattering and concise as yours... A few timid words of gratitude: I'm so glad you enjoyed it; thank you for taking the time to let me know you did. p.s. I don't know that I would call anything I've ever written grand or eloquent, but, heavens, you made my day by saying so! ~megan |
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JSage Member
since 2000-08-25
Posts 91Nashua, NH USA |
I am in love with this poem. It is simply beautiful! The style is wonderful... very unique. I can't wait to read more of your work. -Jes |
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TexUS Member
since 2003-03-20
Posts 228 |
Really great-Loved the images portayed here... |
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