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The Map |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Map I walked into that first marriage as if it was a road that would take me oh, take me to myself I guess. Such a windy road it was and very treacherous at times, there were no signs to tell me direction so I stopped at each beauty seeing a kind word here and a touch just right there but most of the time I was just lost. There were angry rivers and storms bright dart and sometimes I wallowed in a stream called lethargy that trapped me in its bogged dark and sinister hold and it was hard to get out no one helped I had to just put all my pieces together and find some strength that was always there and pull So I looked around at the cave I had dwelt in with all the monsters cozy and curled on my turmoil and I just walked out and kept on going and the sun fell that day into the ocean that had curled and spread answers on my toes and I saw my footprints in the sand and that’s when I found the map. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 08-11-2000).] |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I guess we have to make our own maps don't we nicely written Martie  |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Ah, the map! Martie! I hear you! I found the map too, and that is why I am so happy today. You word things so well, and you seem to be a never-ending font of poetry - you astound me with your muses! With great admiration I thank you for sharing! The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Your map shows your strength within yourself.. I am glad you turned to the right person finally to get direction and besides....who better to know? I love it and you knew I would and once again your imagery is superb.  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Never surprised by the words I find folded into the map of you ... and you drew the lines so well. 'and the sun fell that day into the ocean that had curled and spread answers on my toes and I saw my footprints in the sand and that’s when I found the map.' I think that being able to read the map makes you a wise navigator ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Incredible Martie! This is just beautifully woven. I loved the imagery this brought to my mind, so I'll have to leave you with this smiling thought ... why is it that men just don't seem to be able to ask for directions? Even when I've got the map, and I'm the designated navigator, my guy just doesn't listen!  This was truly beautiful sentiments Martie .... very much enjoyed! Best wishes, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 08-11-2000).] |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Martie you certainly have a way to draw the reader in and hold them. This is so lovely, the imagery of the emotion is terrific... Bonnie |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Only you could describe a map in such a way The wonder poet does it again - leaves me in awe Liz |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I ditto Mark's opinion and share his thoughts on this one Martie.. regards, sudhir |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Martie, Brilliant!! I still hear you, everytime I read you. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Rex--Yes we do, but sometimes it takes a while to figure that out. Rosemary--Hi...glad to see you and I thank you for your so gracious replies and the grace of your poetry. Mark--You're right, who better and I knew you'de love it, cause you aren't afraid to ask for directions. Marge--Thanks sweet sis for the great comment. Kit--My husband and I are both use the Thomas Guide all the time because of our business, a flower shop that delivers...but, I know what you mean. Bonnie--thank you for such a lovely reply. Liz--It is you that is the wonder poet Sudhir--thanks for the ditto Dark Angel--Still coming through loud and clear, I'm glad. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Martie, What a map you've drawn with this one. Nicely done. Michael |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Can you photocopy - or fax me a copy? - going blind in this cave - Guess I got a bad map after the first. - Very well said Martie 5*'s |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
One wonders....did you find the map; or draw your own?.....Great Poem Martie |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Michael--thanks for reading, I'm glad you liked it. Wil--I think you gotta make your own map, mine wouldn't do you any good...Thanks for the kind words. Jamie--I drew my own |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Sounds like we've had similar pasts. The hardest step was that first one, wasn't it? Excellent expression, Martie. Denise |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
That last verse - how I felt when I walked out- but the prior verses are incomparable! you write so very beautifully - it is idescribable <font><font face="Arial, Verdana" size="1" color="#000080">~*Keep love in your heart. A life without it is like a sunless garden when the |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Reminds me of the moment when you finally realize that perhaps you are in the wrong place...you have made a mistake somehow...and correction is in order... from that moment forward the way you look at the situation is always different...and leaving becomes a possibility waiting for the opportunities...James |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I walked into that first marriage as if it was a road that would take me oh, take me to myself I guess. ==================== seeing a kind word here and a touch just right there but most of the time I was just lost. ====================== and it was hard to get out no one helped I had to just put all my pieces together and find some strength that was always there and pull =================== and I just walked out and kept on going and the sun fell that day into the ocean that had curled and spread answers on my toes and I saw my footprints in the sand and that’s when I found the map. ======================= how did i miss this treasure?? (dont answer that) *smile* well you already know you have written me in this... theres so much I could say...but you already know what it would be too... sometimes I just look out the window and wonder when did I get to lost in my own skin ... so content in my discontent ... *sigh*(of complacentcy) did I ever tell you ... I have NEVER seen an ocean ... never walked on a beach... me thinks you already knew that too ... thank you for the things this poem makes me think of ... hope all is well in your garden my sweet friend... still tending to mine... much weeding to do ... and its just so damn hot right now but the Sun Flowers are blooming again love ya me |
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