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Curse of the Rhyme
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Curse of the Rhyme |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Why must I always pen in rhyme? To write free verse is not a crime, Yet I suffer, cruel, vile curse, To ever muse in rhyming verse. Why must at night, I always dream, Of gently flowing mountain stream, Of heaven's glow, and Luna's beam, Please stop the rhyme, I want to scream. Perhaps as babe, was dropped on head, Or maybe 'cause, was bottle fed? Why must my words, sound so alike, What is wrong with odist Mike? The time has come to break away, Of curse that holds me in its sway, Or hold my breath, til I turn purple, I love French toast, with maple syrple. The Forest (my one and only attempt as free verse) He stood alone Amidst the tranquil wonder of the forest An unsatisfied yearning To be touched by the freshening breeze Would he hear The intonations of the whispering wind And be sated? Enveloped by the magnetic charms of the wild? He felt the gentle touch of Silken lips Softly pressed against his brow Soothing warmth Of elfin graces and earthly splendor. He had sought Beneath the heaven's shining stars And he found Amongst the forest, amid the feral creatures Hearts desire. |
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Martini Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 308Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
Wow I think free verse definately works for you Mike I like the way you write Poetry!!  |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
Fly free Mike, fly free... But you're great at both, so why not do both?  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Now that didn't hurt at all, did it...and it was beautiful!!! Write what your heart tells you to write, cause you got the grace for any kind of dance. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
A "Bi-Versal" Poet!. Mike finally came out of the closet with this beautiful free verse. You're tops, Mike Liz |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Martini, thanks for the wow... I like the way you reply, *smile* allan, nope... free verse is an alien creature to me... enjoy others immensely, but my mind operates otherwise. Thanks for the comment. Martie, if I could dance with words as you do my friend, my dance card would be full to the brim of grace. Liz, OMG...hehe love the reply. danke. |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
More More.........You are good at both but this free verse wears well on you. The imagery while reading this was so free and tender.....and.........OH the last line was so perfect! Hey Everybody, Mike has "got it goin on" with the free verse. GO Mike, GO Mike......lol Sorry I am a bit spunky again tonight. Jenn E |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
To find heart's desire is poetry unto itself, whether portrayed in rhyme or riot. You are a natural with both, my friend. Loved the rhyme, loved the riot. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautifully done, Mike! But I know what you mean.....I get a migraine whenever I try to not rhyme.....hehehe Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mike~ Your phrases held in great esteem fall gently to the page ... Venture into the land of free but never forget your rhyming rage ! For it is YOU and is enjoyed by all who read the rhyming verse. Settle back and just relax ... To confuse the muse - could be worse ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Me thinks you should do a bit more free verse my friend, it suits you very well |
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