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A Bringing Together.....
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A Bringing Together..... |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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A Bringing Together (a rewrite) and because I love sunsets! Something about the ocean brings people together. A parking lot filled with cars. The day is closing, people are leaving heavy with umbrellas, picnic baskets and children covered with sand. One little boy is high footen it across the black top with bare feet. He pauses for a minute on a white parking strip then hurries off again. The sun is closing in on the horizon touching many people on the pier with light and shadow. There are strolling couples, families, groups of teenagers and fishermen with buckets, poles slung over their shoulders. There is the smell of cotton candy the music from the Marry-go-round many laughing voices. Over the rail sand become ocean waves where surfers sit gazing wishes at rising mounds passing under them. A bate shop, a restaurant, then the end of the pier. Fisherman line the railing, bleachers face the horizon, a gallery for gazing. The sun turns the sky gold the clouds pink, then to mauve, lavender and a dusty red. There is a reverent quiet amongst these people of such diversity. The brown skinned boy with a bucket of bait and bare feet sits next to a lady in a silk dress and high heeled shoes who sits next to a woman with a baby blanketed against her breast. All of them watch the sun sink in the silver sea and turn the sky magic then disappear behind the immense and rolling ocean. There is a moments silence, breathing is a sigh. This Sunset is an answered prayer of bringing together. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 08-10-2000).] |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"bleachers face the horizon, a gallery for gazing" You took me there, Martie. Just lovely. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
What a beautiful poem... and a beautiful picture painted in my mind. Wonderful job.  "The universe is full of magical things patiently waiting for our wits to grow sharper." Eden Phillpotts *Cassandra Roseen* |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Martie, Not only did you take me there in this vivid scene but you made me realize, regardless where I am, who I am, we all are watching the same sunset, just different views. I loved it. Marcy |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
You have brought the beauty of an ocean sunset to the plains of Kansas... beautifully written Martie. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Martie this has got to be Santa Monica Pier!!!!!! You have penned such wonderful images in this one. I love the ocean and sunsets too as you probably know by now from some of my poems......You are amazing...I think I have said that before but it tis true m'lady tis true. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire--Happy to have taken you there. Dawn--so glad I painted a picture in your mind. Marcy-Yes, I think of that often, along with looking at the same moon...kind of a nice feeling, isn't it. Mike--I'm happy that I did, but I bet the plains of Kansas get some beautiful sunsets too. Mark--Yes, the Santa Monica Pier...and I think I did see you there once...thanks for your wonderful reply. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
 I KNEW IT I KNEW IT I KNEW IT.....I could see it I tell ya I could see it like I was walking along right beside you...... [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 08-10-2000).] |
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Roostr1 New Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 3Flagstaff, Az. USA |
Could almost smell the salt water. Reminded me of the sunsets I used to watch when i was in California. Good work! |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
This was beautiful, filled with such imagry. You are such a wonderful writer. Jenn E |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
lovely images, lovely words, lovely poem... regards to you Martie, Sudhir. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ I've been there - I've seen that - I thank you for taking me back ! I LOVE this part~ 'One little boy is high footen it across the black top with bare feet. He pauses for a minute on a white parking strip then hurries off again.' And, oh boy ! Cotton Candy ! YUM ! Top it all off with the sun taking a dip and it's completely YOU ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark--You were....I remember....what a special time it was. Roostr--It was one of those special California sunsets. Jenn e--What a very nice thing to say...thank you. Sudhir--three lovely compliments...thank you! Marge--No cotton candy for you, you're sweet enough...thanks sis, for all the nice things you say. |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Gee thanks Martie, now I have a craving for a beach and a sunset, only trouble is it's at least a 100 miles away and across London at that...*sigh* Maybe next week...*g* HUSG |
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