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Onion Skin Sadness
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Onion Skin Sadness |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Onion Skin SadnessWear me down by grades... finely sanded, nearly smooth, my trust tainted sallow, a mantle of onion skin sadness shimmering soft and brittle. Fold into me your fickle fragrance. Merged with my own, it's nearly indiscernible, save for just the slightest bouquet of betrayal. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Meadow, A beautiful piece of writing. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
'Tis indeed beautiful writing Claire. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Ouch! Oh, this is very well done, Claire. Such wonderful wording here........ |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Hi Claire ... beautiful, as always ... what a craftsman you are ... |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Thanks fellas, you guys are quick. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire--Beautifully done...great ending...you are an amazing poet |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
what a wonderful piece! I must start reading more of your poetry! "The universe is full of magical things patiently waiting for our wits to grow sharper." Eden Phillpotts *Cassandra Roseen* |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Superb Claire, your way with words always amazes me. . . simply wonderful. . . --------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Great writing! I really love your titles they are so original..... A friend once said to me, refering to her husband, "Our love used to be as solid as a brick house, but he is taking it apart brick by brick." This is excellent work you have penned! |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Claire, So sad and yet so beautiful. I never fail to admire your use of words. Excellent! Michael |
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Artistic Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 107Colorado/Rochester, NY |
oooh...! Nicely spun...! Good job!  ~Artistic~ |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Yep, I knew before I opened the door to this that it was going to be another great read by you After all they always are  The best and most beaytiful things in the world cannot be seen or touched...but are felt in the heart (Helen Keller) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire~ So uniquely phrased. Has the mark of MeadowMuse ! 'Fold into me your fickle fragrance.' *Siiiiiiiiiigh* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ditto Marge.... Claire as Magnificent as Claire regards, sudhir |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
No surprises here, all of your poems are great Yet every one is a surprise Excellent writing Liz |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
*Applauding loudly and jumping up and down here* Claire, just when I think you can't surprise me anymore, you throw in another gem like this one and increase my utmost respect for your poetic talents. Oh how fitting the title for this , what a wonderful piece |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
trust is one thing we never really hand out freely a second time ... we keep it guarded and defend it with ... 'time' Rex |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow, your words are piercing and beautiful at the same time...love this.... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
a mantle of onion skin sadness shimmering soft and brittle. Fold into me your fickle fragrance. Merged with my own, WOW you are truely amazing as all have said...your words are sharp but sweet. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
with such simple words you bring not only sight but taste and scent as well |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Martie, Dawn Eclipse, Sven, ethome, Michael, Artistic, Jeffrey, Marge, Sudhir, Liz, Ruth, Rex, Corazon, Mark, Paula ~ Thanks to all, in earnest, for reading. Your gracious comments have made a difference in my morning. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Claire, I've read this at least five times, and the only reason I didn't comment is because I did not know what to day. I still don't. Just know that I think this is remarkable writing... |
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Steve B Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 140Southern PA |
Claire~ having read several of your wonderful poems...and enjoyed them all...yet this one I do like so very much...*S* Steve B |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
serenity, what you said is just right, my friend. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem enough to let me know. Steve, thank you so much. I don't believe we've "met" yet, so please allow me to welcome you to Passions. Take care ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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