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An Apology (my first poem on here)
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An Apology (my first poem on here) |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
My love so true and dear i have an apology to state, a sorrow for you to hear. i love you, and this you know to be true. all the sacrifices i would make i would make them just for you. you deserve much more more than what i can give you deserve yachts and planes and the finiest linens. you should drink fresh water from moutains up a top, you shouldn't worry your beautiful face your radiance makes the heart stop. your bed should be covered in rose petals pillows stuffed with feathers from a dove springs made of the sturdiest metal a blanket stitched from my love. No, it seems not to be the case indeed far be it that you would have such things my deepest regret... a heartfelt apology can i tell you a secret though, a secret between you and me? all i can offer is my love a vast open sea that surpasses infinity. i love you jay. [This message has been edited by JnR4eva (edited 08-11-2000).] |
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Steve B Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 140Southern PA |
sighhhhhing .. I feel what you feel.. as I have been and are in near the same state.... and even though I have been around the block and experienced much.. I know no words to help..... except to express them as you have.... I see we joined at the same time.... good luck... and best hopes for you.. Steve B |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
Thank you very much for your support Steve, and yes you are right we are new members. I wish you the same luck 10 times over. I was afraid that such a poem would get lost in this torrent of poetry and prose. But thank you once again, I appreciate it much  p.s. I will look out for your poems in the future. |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
What a very good poem to open Passions with! I just love the was described all the things that your lover should have. I mean, the descriptions were more creative and deeper than most love poems I've read. Great piece and welcome to Passions! Nathan |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Welcome to passions and no need to appologize for any words that come from the heart |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
to nate dogg: Thank you very much for your kinds words. I am a bit speechless though, I would have never thought I would hear such things lol... thank you for your warm welcome and words. I look forward to catching up on some more of your poems. to hoot_owl_rn: Thank you very much for your welcome and kind words as well And what you say is true, about how it shouldn't matter, but it is a feeling that I have that needs to be expressed. I think i found a perfect place to do just that. Thank you once again |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
wow...how beautiful! i loved the way each word portrayed an image, nicely writen and so sweet! i loved this so much: "your bed should be covered in rose petals pillows stuffed with feathers from a dove springs made of the sturdiest metal a blanket stitched from my love." would love to read more! Salooma |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
to salooma: Thank you very much for your kind words. I will confess that I believe that part which you quoted was the 'apex' of the poem. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I'm looking forward to posting my second one soon |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
jnr, this was beautifully expressed. welcome to passions! I am glad to see that you are in love...its the best! Take care. Amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
what an awesome expression of your love... gtreat writing...keep it up and welcome to passions! Tony |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
to aimster: thank you so much for ur kind words....yes i have to agree that being in love is divine..i couldnt know no other greater feeling thank you once againto T McCoy thank you for your kind words and welcome. i hope that my second poem would be just as successful. thank you |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Jay is lucky lucky lucky. What a wonderful expression of love. Beautiful read here. Warmest Welcome. Jenn E |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
OOOOOOHHHHHHH MMMMMMMYYYYYYY......these are some of the most loving thoughts I have seen here and your format for putting them down is exquisite. WELCOME to Passions and I look forward to more from you. |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
to Jenn E - thank you for your welcome and thank you for such a sweet comment it means a lot to Mark Bohannan : What a complament...I am left speechless lol. I am happy that you enjoyed the poem. I can only pray that the second would be just as, or if not better, than "an apology" Thank you |
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