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SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

0 posted 2000-08-09 04:21 PM

I Slipped From You

I slipped from you
in times
of question,
in times of
tested strengths.

Loosely gripped love
in hearts
unsure,
in dreams of
try.

Floating from you
on air
of free,
on silkened
sky.

Tracing hours
in days
of you,
in seconds of
it's term.

I slipped.
I slipped from you,
and this,...
is where
I am.

Jamie
Member Elite

since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

1 posted 2000-08-09 04:31 PM

Squeeze to tight and suffocate
grip to light and slip away

Lovely poem

Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".

Michael G
Senior Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 579
Nashville

2 posted 2000-08-09 04:34 PM

very nicely worded and so full of emotion....

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

3 posted 2000-08-09 04:40 PM

Nice poem

I really enjoyed it

kynder
Senior Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida

4 posted 2000-08-25 01:07 PM

oh wow..... this is sooooooooo good!!!! wow fire, i offer you my hand to help you get up and try to find them again, if that is what you wanted. excellent work my friend!!

kynder

Sunshine can not bleach
The snow,
Nor time unmake what
Poets know.

Ralph Waldo Emerson

Alicat
Member Elite

since 1999-05-23

Posts 4094
Coastal Texas

5 posted 2000-08-25 02:02 PM

Nice job, Spitfire. I especially enjoyed the format...looks like a dwindling or diminishing from the first line to the last of each verse. Grants an apt graphical portrayal of what the speaker is saying.

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

6 posted 2000-08-25 02:05 PM

Spitfire...for some reason haven't read anything from you in a while...either not here enought or too much in one forum, or a combination...don't know...but after reading this, realized I miss your writing...wonderful, just as I remember it.

jwesley

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

7 posted 2000-08-25 08:46 PM

Another incredible writing. Going in my folder, right now.
cat....

insect
Senior Member

since 2000-04-22

Posts 1014

8 posted 2000-08-29 06:33 PM

Beautiful title!
Are you really slipping away?
I hope not!
Here take my hand.
Now my other hand.
Now put your right foot in.
Take your right foot out.
You do the hokey pokey.
And you shake it all about.
Oops! Got carried away!!
We can dance another time.
Or we can dance right now?
Anyway loved your poem!
Here if you feel yourself slipping away
Just press this button…OK!!!

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Not yet now look what you've done!!
Quick run before the Love Police get here!
I'll just tell them I slipped and fell against you….ummm!
I mean the button!!

EagleOne
Member Elite

since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

9 posted 2000-08-30 01:45 AM

This one almost slipped through without me seeing it! Glad it didn't.

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.

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