Open Poetry #9 |
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Gardens Edge |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Take the edge, Steel sharpened slicing away, Stone spinning, Fine honing, The blades prepare for the day. Take the edge. At the edge of the garden, He begins Trimming the high climbing rose. By the gateway of the gray stone Entering, Greening of new grasses grows. By the wall over looking Draping down Branches of the willow trees. With sharp blades keeps the pathway, Clears the ground, Improves what with looking sees. Sand replaces winter’s weeds, Straighten stones, Dabbing some paint where it needs. The sunlight creeps in the sky, While working, Till darkness is again nigh. Then returning from the garden, His working, Makes the garden more of him. Sunrise new, Finds flowers blooming brightly, Sparkles dew, Caressing, Glitters in touching lightly, Redressing. Gloom |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
An interesting perspective, I found this to contain a sort of somber beauty. Thoughtful, well constructed, captivating in detail. Quite lovely. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
His working, Makes the garden more of him. Sunrise new, Finds flowers blooming brightly, Sparkles dew, Caressing, Glitters in touching lightly, Redressing. do love this one PG... ~~soft smiles... MM |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Fabulous metaphor here...and oh 'tis true, 'tis true...and I love yer name too! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Nicely written. Enjoyed. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Meadowmuse, Somber construction, is a very good descriptive term for me and my poetry. You compliment me greatly. Thank You, MMoonchild, I am glad you can grab bits of the world in a poetic happiness. Thank you, serenity, Some look at life and ask why, I just see the metaphors. Thank you,Mike, I am pleased you could enjoy my words. Gloom |
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