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By Witch's Tears
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By Witch's Tears |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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A touch-stone, dropped, from sweaty palm, smoothed by years of worries' balm. A hermit, haunched, in hidden cave-- a beating heart in shallow grave. From a warm wind, of western sighs, she smelled the hint of her demise. With magick rings of destiny, a casting of the spoken seed, and incense herb, the vulture's beak and all the toys that desperate seeks. Enchantments spoke-- words in the smoke, the cords untied of love denied, a flame of fire-- the dead's desire... And then she keened, unholy tone, oppressed beneath, weight of love's stone. She scanned the sky, in search of signs, and laughed at witch who wondered why, Immortals, how they ever died, and human fools, who chose to cry. An answer now came crystal clear, for down her cheek rolled one sweet tear. The beating heart she begged of him, to have him near her once again, a velvet glove, the touch of love, now sanctified by witch's tears. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Very powerful and filled with sorrow...I love the way this flowed. Keep up the exellent work!  *Krista Knutson* "You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back." -Barbara DeAngelis |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
now this is smooth....it flows so beautifully...like smoke on the water so to speak..hehe....i love it......well done indeed.... "To live is to love; To truly LOVE is to live!" ~kg~ |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
wow! that was a great poem. I liked the story it told. well done. "The universe is full of magical things patiently waiting for our wits to grow sharper." Eden Phillpotts *Cassandra Roseen* |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Flow it did. Speak?,...Uh Huh!!! Yep it did! Serenity,...this tale you've set before us is mystical and sad and so well told. Aah. Thank ya mam. Be well now. *Peace. [This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 08-09-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ Indeed ! LoVeLy ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Artistic Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 107Colorado/Rochester, NY |
Wow... nice poem! Flowed so beautifully that it revealed a tale as I read! Nice! ~Artistic~ |
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Artistic Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 107Colorado/Rochester, NY |
Wow... nice poem! Flowed so beautifully that it revealed a tale as I read! Nice! ~Artistic~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
She scanned the sky, in search of signs, and laughed at witch who wondered why, Immortals, how they ever died, and human fools, who chose to cry. An answer now came crystal clear, for down her cheek rolled one sweet tear. .... .... Okay Serene one, You will be treated to a certain amount of ramble now... skip it if you wish to... 
If you have a yes to all the above then you have realised the essence of serenity, peace and tranquil. The sound of the water lashing at the rocks is heart's music, and the leaves rustling with the wind is the dance of the soul.... -------- now you might wonder what made me come up with all these words here... and how much time it took... etc Reasons three: the amazing flow of your poem, your perfect pen-name and Marge's comment "Serenity indeed!"... and the time it took: about 3 minutes... but three minutes of complete serenity came to my mind with the thoughts of the waterfall that is at about 15 minutes walking distance from my home in faraway India. (and it was my pleasure)... My regards to you, Sudhir [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 08-09-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wow. Thanks, to everyone, but most especially Balladeer, who very generously took the time to explain so gently and patiently about "meter" and what makes a poem "flow"---you sir, have proven your point! LOL. Thank you. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Ive said it before.. I'll say it again ... your so cool it hurts  this poem ROCKS me twin... awesome my girlie girl ... roll the bones baby...cast a spell... i do so love seeing you play with poetry *winkie winkie* me |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Serenity...... A witch's tears are very powerful brew, and so was this poem. I thank you from the bottom of my witch's heart!!! (Halloween is my B-day, so don't laugh..or I will shed a tear!!!) I have but one goal in life......It is: Not to have just one goal in Life!! ~ ~ ~ Sunny ~ ~ ~ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Talk about going with the flow!!! Ya done good, serenity. A real quick study you are! You've turned into a beautiful flower..er, flow-er Glad I could help.... |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Wonderful poetry. Enjoyed muchly. |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
this is one of my favorites, is it a book submission?? huh, huh? i will vote, thank you for this blanket of spelled indurance, all always kindly. Kindly, Redheart Angrybraids |
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