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Our Forever Came Today
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Our Forever Came Today |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
We made ourselves a promise a while back along the way. To always be together, forever and a day. But while we were not looking something got in the way. For now it appears as though our forever came today. Blinded by the tears of broken shattered dreams. Picking up the pieces we've been here before, it seems. Sometimes these things happen when you no longer feel the same. No fingers will be pointed, no one is to blame. As we struggle with the truth, our feelings now sketched in grey. We need to fully accept, our forever came today. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Awwwww so sad and touching... Eloise, the way you have put it is excellent... regards, sudhir |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
this is very sad...but you said it in a way i never could. thank you for giving me words! very nice! ~Dawn whatcha doing in this darkness baby when you know love will set you free? will you stay in the sea forever Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Eloise...this is an excellent reminder that love doesnt just hang around...you have to work at keeping it alive. You did this so sweetly with no recriminations and no blame...thanks for the reminder never say never |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Eloise... I need a reminder sometimes that 'forever' has a way of sneaking up on you and waving goodbye! If I remember that, then it's easier not to take things for granted. Thank you for this poem, it has inspired me!!! I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Sudhir, thank you kind sir.  Thanks Dawn and your welcome.  Paula, thank you for your comments. If it's worth hanging on to, then it's worth the hard work. Thank you Sunny. I'm honored that I inspired you. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Nicely written poem that gives you pause. |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Eloise, This was so touching. Yes, forever can sneak up on us and their is no one to blame here, that is what I really admire in this poem. Thank you for this. Jenn E |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Eloise~ What a touching write. 'Sometimes these things happen when you no longer feel the same. No fingers will be pointed, no one is to blame.' Such an important message is this ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
I just adore this one 4ever n a day! =) Coco =) |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Mike, thank you for reading. Jenn, Sometimes things just happen and you just have to move on. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Marge, break-ups could be so much easier if there wasn't always the finger pointing. Thanks. Coco, thank you. I'm so glad that you like this one. [This message has been edited by Eloise (edited 08-09-2000).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent writing...this touches my heart..James |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Thank you James. I'm glad you enjoyed it. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Eloise, Good work, I enjoyed. |
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