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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Hey...kinda a new poster in open...would like any suggestions u got....thank you! Nameless Nothings Fluttery days of endless rumor, Upon darkened stars ablaze in fire. Mornings of infinite, drowning chatter, With gloomy nights of similar fate. Lively hearts wildly unleashed, And clouds of darkness fill me. Fearless cries escape the tongue, And splutter into nameless nothings. The longest day withdraws in worry, Only to the comfort of the night. Daybreak awakes the hurt once more, Another unpromising day begins. [This message has been edited by Ron (06-25-2011 10:10 AM).] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Salooma... It doesn't look like you'll be needing much help!! This was a great poem with lots of images to think about... Nice Job!!! I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Salooma, This is winderful poetry.... ---- The longest day withdraws in worry, Only to the comfort of the night. Daybreak awakes the hurt once more, Another unpromising day begins. ---- great images within some excellent lines... enjoyed thoroughly... regards, sudhir |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Hi Salooma, I really liked this....really. By your asking for suggestions, I feel you think this needs something. Am I right??? It does needs something, but at this moment I cannot put my finger on it. I will read and re-read until I find it. I am glad you posted it. Robert if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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