Open Poetry #9 |
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Wrong Way Down a Two-Way Street...watch out for semis, Ninny... |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) ![]() |
Holding hands To show Affection Walking one way In wrong Direction Of trafficked street Subject to Head on collision Better might be Your love discreet To make sure The wrong way Is right decision I wish there were A land for me I’d close my eyes And drive for miles Never hit a Lover as me Love is free I’ll take you Hitchhikers all Along the way |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Always a wonderful surprise awaits me when I click on your posts Walt! Wonderful, thanks for the smile ![]() Best wishes, /Kit |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sometimes that detour down the wrong street leads you to pleasures you didnt expect never say never |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Walt great play on words....wonderful read....even when two are together things can be so wrong even though they look fine... being trapped inside a bad relationship makes one want to run away to a better place..... good writing!! |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Walt, Your work I always so much enjoy reading, I will be looking for ya out there,,, ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey, this is Wonderful Walt ![]() I have to ditto Paula Finn's reply. So very true. Loved these lines, I can relate to them. Holding hands To show Affection Walking one way In wrong Direction Well Done my Friend ![]() [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 08-07-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
A cautionary tale, Walt, but nevertheless-- "I wish there were a land for me..." exactly the sentiment that compels the magic of the road...well done, walt...as always, still your prez... |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Well NINNY...(HUMPH) the semis nearly hit me in my invisbile face...lollol AND YES - this is COOL...COOOOOL.....COOOOOLLLLLLLLLLLLL I love this - particularly the last stanza... you rocking writer you... ![]() "He looked across the silky surface of the Severn, and remembered that it was a famously difficult river with fierce tides..." From J |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I wish there were A land for me I’d close my eyes And drive for miles Never hit a Lover as me Love is free I’ll take you Hitchhikers all Along the way .... WOWIE, Walt WOWIE...... regards, sudhir |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Maybe walk with your head up Walt...yuh?....lol Great writing WoW. Always a treat when you post. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Vaporous One Junior Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 35 |
Interesting wordplay, and a nice trip. ![]() |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
got my thumb out, pack on my back, ready to go! Corinne |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
The flow and rythym I have read from you I truly love. You are a very refreshing poet, I love your work. ![]() Jenn E LOL on Corrine with her thumb out! ![]() |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx guys ummm i hate to bring it up but theres plenty room in the VW bus but who has gas money!! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
LOL Walt, your title got me! You are so creative with your words! As far as the 'gas' goes, you'll have to resort to the natural kind from beans...like it was in the Alley ![]() <*\\\>< The will of God will never lead you, where the grace of God cannot keep you. |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
great. I loved it. ![]() |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
I see you're beginning to lean toward free verse a little here lately. Unexpected surprises from Walt. |
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