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Silhouette of Fire (re-post, for me friend)
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Silhouette of Fire (re-post, for me friend) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Allow me to watch shadows dance in silhouette of fire. Allow my fingers trembling tips butterflies that kiss desire. Deny me not, my ache for you. Permit me, please, my need to savour. Let it be sweet in pure relief, releasing dam of God's good favour. Be gentle as I take my time, ponder possibility of rhyme... A thousand years, a million tears, I've waited for your voice, sublime. How startling it is to see, all I've believed that could not be, standing right in front of me in ashes, of myself, despised... So simple. And I am so surprised. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
shadows dance in silhouette of fire. Allow my fingers trembling tips butterflies that kiss desire. Deny me not, my ache for you. Permit me, please, my need to savour. ==================== Be gentle as I take my time, ponder possibility of rhyme... A thousand years, a million tears, I've waited for your voice, sublime. How startling it is to see, all I've believed that could not be, standing right in front of me in ashes, of myself, despised... So simple. And I am so surprised. ================== oh i do so love the way you ache me twin... (seems to be a lot of that going around)  *sigh* this is just so perfect, so sensual and smouldering.. so poetically serenity... i'm taking this one to bed,me twin LOL sweet dreams me sweet sen me |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
serenity, very lovely writing. Yes very softly sensual.  Parker |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
This is so sensual and tender....it is truely what I have come to expect from you and you have not let me down.(no pressure...huh girl) Beautiful creation from you on this one. |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
serenity~ My dear, this is absolutely wonderful! How startling it is to see, all I've believed that could not be, standing right in front of me in ashes, of myself, despised... So simple. And I am so surprised. I, too, sometimes have the bad habit of having everything I need right in front of me but being too blind to see it. You touch me deeply with this on, girl! Love Ya~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
serenity, this is a great poem. I love the way it moves, flows, the message it delivers, and the emotions it envokes. Great job! Unrequited love sucks. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"How startling it is to see, all I've believed that could not be, standing right in front of me, in ashes, of myself, despised... So simple. And I am suprised." That sums it all up all right and with beautiful poetic words....great poem! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I would like to thank everybody for their kindness once again, it means so much to me to have sincere encouragement...I humbly curtsey and thank you much...see you guys back at the bottom...LOL!!! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Serenity, Great repost here!! This one says a lot I think. Always amazing to discover yourself isn't it? Glad you did. --------------------------------------------- Be gentle as I take my time, ponder possibility of rhyme... A thousand years, a million tears, I've waited for your voice, sublime --------------------------------------------- These are wonderful lines. Nice writing. Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Breathtaking Serenity..... Absolutely beautiful! I could never pick one stanza or line to be my favorite so I'll simply say I loved it all! Magnificent writing~ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Now THIS is what I call excellent writing! Very impressive, miss |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Great poem. Glad to have stumbled upon such a succcumbing grip. thanks Rich |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
serenity, oh to be consumed by THIS fire. . . --------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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