Open Poetry #9 |
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Loss For Words |
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the romantic fanatic Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 26Spokane, WA U.S.A. ![]() |
Friend... For days uncounted You have been lost; Roaming seldom seen passages of your own heart, Vainly reaching In the darkness, Withdrawing your grasp and holding nothing. And then you see a light; Eager for the warmth, The beautiful light... You run so fast, Try so hard, And let logic step aside, Just for a moment, And let slip; Your dreams come tumbling down, And all sight leaves you: You are again lost; Lost sight of the future Lost all care about the past... Loss for words, and a .44 in your hand.... [This message has been edited by the romantic fanatic (edited 08-05-2000).] |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Ah, how well we know the pain of watching a friend in trouble, desperate. Life... so difficult... sometiems rewarding, sometimes not. I guess we all just do the best we can. Your words for your friend show your heart... that you care and are worried. I'm positive your friend appreciates this, knowing that someone else cares enough to notice their pain. Welcome to Passions "romantic fanatic!" There are many friends here as well. I know I for one will be looking forward to more posts by you! Chris |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hello romantic fanatic.... It is good to read words of caring from one friend to another. Your friend should feel very fortunate that you're standing by.....that's hard to come by (everywhere but right here!!) Welcome to Passions, the place where friends share and grow!! I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I too know how hard it is to watch a friend in trouble...this is very caring and very well written. Welcome to passions! ![]() *Krista Knutson* "You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back." -Barbara DeAngelis |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Deep Deep sighhhhhh...Welcome romantic... I can relate to your friend except for the .44..when I felt this way a while back Self-Loss Maybe it's the loneliness The words of silent love That once when heard Had filled the space That's emptiest now of. Maybe it's the noiseless sounds That fill my head with doubt The lack of touch, Caressing skin The loving done without. Maybe it's the loss of you At least so says my mind The busy always, elsewhere though I've losses I can't find. Maybe it's the loss of me The one of years back when A smile was all I needed shared to love and love again. To me it's now a searching game Of hide and seek, you'll find I'm always writing words of wish Of memories left behind. ~~soft smiles Maureen |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family. Your poem is excellent, full of pain, love and loss. You will find many souls here that have felt what you feel and are willing to share with you. Please check your email for a special message! ![]() |
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Vaporous One Junior Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 35 |
Very well put. I have been there, or close, myself...and you put it into words very well. ![]() |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I know how helpless it feels to watch someone sliding down...hugs to you, and welcome to the forum...excellent poem! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Welcome to Passions! This is so powerful.....the last line of course knocks the wind out of you...To watch a friend go through this is harder than going through it yourself I think....atleast it is for me. I'm looking forward to many more......An excellent entrance~ |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Romantic Fanatic, I know the pain you must be going through watching a friend in despair....but you have shown your loyalty and love by stepping out and writting this very caring and loving poem. I hope today sees you smiling..I look forward to your next post!! Blessed be, Beth~ |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hey welcome to our humble home! ![]() ![]() Deep thoughts here...will be looking out for more of them! ![]() |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470 |
This is an excellent poem..I really felt a personal connection to it. It is written beautifully and it flows so well...I can't wait to read more of your stuff...keep posting!!...bethann You can never have too much fiction; reality can be such a bore |
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BreyerRose Member
since 2000-08-12
Posts 55Easton, Pa USA |
I was once much like the friend you write about. It was only because of the people who love me that I could close that chapter of my life. People at that point of depression don't realizes that the ones they love love them back. You've proved it nicely in this poem. And if by any chance you have written about yourself without admitting it(I sometimes do) remember, people do love you. You have many friends, some right here at Passions. Great first post. Hugs and Kisses, Paula |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I think everyone can relate to the "roaming", then the spark of hope, and the eagerness....then the fall. Seems to be the cycle we all live over and over...You really portrayed some deep thoughts in this. I felt it. Welcome, as the others have said, and I too, will be looking for more of your works! Thanks for sharing such an emotional piece. |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
romantic fanatic-Welcome, I have also experienced this emotional emptiness and have had friends in the same situation, hopefully we get through and are stronger for it, it is nice this person has your support. Nice piece. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Welcome to Passions ![]() |
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Heather Miller Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 409Bryan, Ohio USA |
very nicely written. Passionate feelings. Hugs, Heather Without the experiance of love where would we be? We would have no memories to cherish. With love it brings hurt with hurt bittersweet memories. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
RF, I also like to say welcome, and a great personal first post. Parker |
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