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stuck with you (inside my head)
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stuck with you (inside my head) |
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acidic angel Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 12winnipeg, canada |
please note this is a song i wrote. maybe i'll get a media file of it when i get a microphone. think.. garbage style  i wonder where time has gone why everything went so damn wrong but times are different and people change but still i wish they were the same sometimes i want things to stop just because i'm boiling over my top it doesn't matter why it doesn't matter now do i still know there is no way out all i wanted was one goodbye another reason not to cry i remember how it felt so right but things have changed and it seems there is nothing left disappearing into the light please tell me that i'm going to be alright i need you to hold me i need you to love me why does that have to be so wrong the rain still falls so many endless calls draining my many means of though blurring the truth that is right before my eyes... stuck with you (inside my head) tell me it's true (something i dread) something to do (did you mean what you said) i'm still stuck with you (I'm stuck with you) my love is true (it's in my head)  |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Great song. I liked it. Enjoyed it quite a bit. Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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acidic angel Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 12winnipeg, canada |
yay thanks ^^ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Welcome to Passions....acidic angel...I've been a song lyric writer for many years, I have a friend that writes the music for me and we put it together that way. These are very good lyrics and they flow very well. Just one suggestion.....the last part of the song is really excellent... "stuck with you (insdie my head)" and so on til the end.. this would make such an excellent chorus to inject after the second verse and it would get the hook in there early and make the title stand out......just my opinion that's all...great work! |
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