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Tonight Comes
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Tonight Comes |
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Sunshine
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Tonight Comes In silvered slippers a spirit appears a waft of breeze will blow her near she is an apparition to only you but in your reverie, what could she do? She knows your heart, your soul, your mind she is but a reflection of fantasies kind she knows your pain, your hopes, it's true she embodies the fire of golden red gone blue. An apparition of common's sense she may clutch your recompense as to her you may yearn to aver and in your fancy hold her near. She will stroke your face and whisper and all you will crave is just to kiss her as her sweet siren's song is sung and in that moment, the tonight becomes a treasured instant, the import will pass as you cling to memories past in silvered slippers a spirit appears and in your fancy, you hold her near. ©Karilea Rilling Jungel 4 August 2000 |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sunshine---oooh, but I like this!!! Has an ethereal quality, beautiful and wise. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Yes, very beautiful, Sunshine!  Denise |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Serenity, the kindest compliment...comes from you...thank you... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Denise, you snuck in on me, but I thank you as it is you who causes such inspiration... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She will stroke your face and whisper and all you will crave is just to kiss her as her sweet siren's song is sung and in that moment, the tonight becomes a treasured instant, the import will pass as you cling to memories past in silvered slippers a spirit appears and in your fancy, you hold her near. ======================= very cool Sun, mystic and cryptic... I liked the essence of this poem much... as well as the rhyme and pace.. it built up in its flow very cool, indeed jm |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Wowzeeers---Karilea this is so beautiful and the images are among the highest in a man's fantasies....at least this man. Loved it much.  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
The gentle, whispering, enticing approach of Night...just beautiful, Sunshine. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Sunshine, What a beautiful poem.. I loved it rosepetals25 |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Oh My, Oh My, Oh My.............So peaceful and tender...........dove-like. What a beautiful portrayal of night. Memories pass but are never forgotten. The fact that you can reflect on them so fondly makes this all the more special.I loved it! Jenn E |
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Sunshine
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Janet Marie, thanks for looking in! Your Response! Exactly what I was hoping for! |
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Sunshine
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Mark, your words are kind, thank you, Sir! Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Sunshine
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My little Meadowmuse, kind words indeed...and my inspiration is helped by you...thanks! Rose, thank you for the kind words! Jenn, your words are in my heart...thank you! < !signature--> Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 08-04-2000).] |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I can only agree with everyone, sunshine. It is very beautifully done....... |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Oh, I thought this was so beautiful! So well written. Sauni Sauni :) Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Nice work Sunny, Sorry 'bout the delay... I'll get an email update off to you soon. Lots of things in my head... kinda scrambled right now... I'm ok though... thanks for the e and caring. Dale |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
has wistful been said...love it yuh |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Been going through my mind Sunshine?? This is wonderful. . . just made me sigh. . . *sigh*. . . see?? Excellent my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
lovely flow...picked your words well great imaginery,I liked it a lot If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sunshine....beautiful mystic images flowing out of the mist and into the heart of the reader...WOW! just excellent! |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Beautifull writting...I liked this alot!~ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Sigh very beautiful, this one has me floating in the clouds. a treasured instant, the import will pass as you cling to memories past in silvered slippers a spirit appears and in your fancy, you hold her near. "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
very lovely theme, and you carried it through beautifully Very soft and tender and enjoyable to read Liz |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well, everyone above has certainly made my Sunday morning! I thought this had settled down into the bottom of the archives...but no, kind friends, kinder words...thank you all... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
The silvered slippers gave an interesting visual appeal to this phantom of the night "A clay pot sitting in the sun will always be a clay pot. It has to go through the white heat of the furnace to become porcelain." --Mildred W. St |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
In silvered slippers a spirit appears a waft of breeze will blow her near she is an apparition to only you but in your reverie, what could she do? .. .. She will stroke your face and whisper and all you will crave is just to kiss her as her sweet siren's song is sung and in that moment, the tonight becomes a treasured instant, the import will pass as you cling to memories past in silvered slippers a spirit appears and in your fancy, you hold her near. ............ Karilea, A delighted awe-struck reader is blinking in a deep reverence to you... my thought channels have become single tracked single issued... and all the words in my head are unifying to one word... MAJESTIC... regards, sudhir p.s. the title reminded me of a Joe Cocker song When the night comes... initially, but that song - in fact one of my liked ones -is way out of league.... [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 08-06-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Tess, Sudhir, thank you for your kind words and comments...esp. for pulling out that parts that said something to you... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea, my 'silver-slippered' friend~ Lovely, lovely, lovely. A quality of the mystique that is you. 'and in that moment, the tonight becomes a treasured instant' Yep ! It's got your signature all over it ! Lovely ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sunshine
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Marge, aren't you the kindest friend...thank you! |
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