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Exultation of Torn..........Duet with Michael G
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Exultation of Torn..........Duet with Michael G |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Scars of psyche commemorates The impact of another’s molestation Her soul decaying into solitude A heart chokes on bile without reply As his questions persist without mercy There could be no love from him now With her purity taken and victimized Her tongue silent offering no account The warmth of her lover’s touch pangs As she drifts subconsciously away He will walk to her side bothered by some some iterpretation of what he thinks he needs to say of what he needs to be at this time of being human and a man. He touches her at a distance unable to overcome the silent barages that accompany his forlorn heart his soul taken and abused as he sees his love unconsious of him. It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
oooooohhhhhh very cool you guys... cryptic and angst ridden... very cool indeed... There could be no love from him now With her purity taken and victimized Her tongue silent offering no account The warmth of her lover’s touch pangs As she drifts subconsciously away He will walk to her side bothered by some some iterpretation of what he thinks he needs to say of what he needs to be at this time of being human and a man. He touches her at a distance unable to overcome the silent barages that accompany his forlorn heart his soul taken and abused as he sees his love unconsious of him. ====================== love this ones mystic dark mood too it excellent collaboration later-duet-gators jm |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Thank you Jan. We had fun putting this together. Glad you liked it. Perhaps a touch of both of us here. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Wonderful you two.....the haunting of life's little paths we choose often grow to enormous lengths and unfortuantely most of the time it is not the good paths that do so. Really liked this alot.  Two thumbs up |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Ah this is wonderful! I compliment you both. Just excellent how you have depicted the emotions of these two lovers......and the title grew up as I read this great poetry. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
WOW!! I couldn't tell who wrote which part and that says a lot about both of you. Both of you write so well. I really enjoyed this read < !signature-->The best and most beaytiful things in the world cannot be seen or touched...but are felt in the heart (Helen Keller) [This message has been edited by Jeffrey Carter (edited 08-05-2000).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent poem. . . Very powerful. . . Well done. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Before I disappear from here for a week I just wanted to say thank you to all of you. Mark, Ethome, Jeffery, and Sven.......thank you all very much for you compliments and your support. I would like to thank Michael for allow me to write with him. You sir, are a very talented poet and I hope to learn from you if you will let me. We had fun with this and I hope to write more together. Thanks agian......... And I leave you in Michael's capable hands Marina< !signature--> It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley [This message has been edited by Marina (edited 08-06-2000).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A very emotional and exceptional connection...Marina thank you for all the lovely comments you have for me...you are such a soothing pleasure...James |
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Michael G Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579Nashville |
james,mark,jeffery,sven,ethome....... thankyou all so much for the kindness of you replies....... janet, my poet in heart, thanks........... and marina, anytime, I had fun doing this..... |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Thanks again to all!!!!! James, you are so sweet to me. I feel the exactly the same way about your compliments and your kind words also. Thank you, my friend. Michael, again.....thank you. Be careful what you say.......I just may hold you to that!!  Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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