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Three Softly Whispered Words
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Three Softly Whispered Words |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Three softly whispered words That take my breath away Three softly whispered words As the dawn turns into day Three softly whispered words That echo in my heart Three softly whispered words That tear my world apart Three softly whispered words That came right out of the blue Three softly whispered words ....I'M LEAVING YOU.... These words that drop like icy rain From lips that just yesterday I kissed These words so unexpected so difficult to believe Your eyes so cold and distant Your arms held tight against your side Leaves me banished and broken hearted And still so very surprised I never knew you felt like this You never said one word Til you looked at me and said Three softly whispered words. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Paula I hope this is not happening...these are painful memories...yes.... I know the pain of these words...and the loneliness and the regret... you have shared these feelings well...take care...James |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Paula...wow...a whole lot of whispering going on...sorry to see the bitter side of a lovely gesture... |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
this one hurts...but hopefully the pain passes.. ~Dawn "Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
OUCH....I truely hope that this is not from your life. The pain is very evident here. Your pen shows the emotions well. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I hope this is fiction - if not [[hugs]] - you've not lost your friends here me included -regardless - the poem is very well written ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Paula, I must echo the above, hope this isn't happening or recent... Those words are for feared that any I know. Parker....hugs just incase.  |
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ddgoose Member
since 2000-07-25
Posts 250Baltimore, MD, USA |
Paula Beautifully written and very sad. If this had to happen, just as well as it happened now and you are still young enough to get on with your life. You have a compassionate and lovely heart and you will find love. didi |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Paula, The is such a heartbreaking poem and a story that so often repeated...well penned and said...this will be my last post to you for awhile since I'm leaving Passions...I just wanted to stop by and read one of your latest poems. I always enjoy your poetry so. Please visit my web site when you have some extra time. Take care, sweet friend and see you sometime in the future. Michael Proust- "Love is space and time measured by the heart" |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
My goodness. That is one devastating poem. What an incredible blend of romantic and sullen, shocking images. This is like a tour de force of pain. I hope and pray that this was from indirect inspiration only. Think I had better read that again... Trev. |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Mrs Finn I know someone who writes as beautifully as you has to a lovely lady. This can't be happening to you. If so here's a few big ole H U G G S from me. Your poem was awesome as always. I thought the words to be whispered would be "I Love You" I was very surprised during my read. You express feeling so well, as I could imagine just what was felt in this piece. Garfield |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
hi Paula, You caught me off guard on this read... The shock N emptiness in such scenario is well expressed... I admire this writing in every verse you've shared... I need not say more but smiles2U my friend  |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Yet another man that needs a poke in the eye! This piece reached in and yanked at my heart. So sad and shocking. Well expressed Paula ~Sheri |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Ok before I start replying individually I have to say...this isnt happeneing to me...my love and I are just dandy thank you...when I started with those words what I had in mind was "I love you"...my muse had other ideas however... James...lol friend you know and I know how words can be...thanks for your concern Sunshine...truly I am ok...just a poem after all...thanks Dawn...no pain friend just a muse with a mind of her own Mark...no I am very happy thankyou Bill...thank you and you know how I value your special friendship Parker...I will always take a hug from you...there are very welcome...but I am happy didi...I have found the love of my life...this is just my muse acting out lol Michael...I will miss you like crazy and I wish this had been a happier read... but please know its JUST a poem Trev...hey guy I am fine really...its just a feeling that I felt the need to write...thanks for your concern Garfield...why thank you sir...you are so sweet...I too thought the words were going to be I love you Coco...thank you I am glad I can shock at times...we all need a little shaking up every now and again Irie...my love is wonderful to me...this was just my muse writing what she chose to write [This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 09-22-2000).] |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Paula, I'm so happy that is is fiction! I would hate to see you go through the pain you express so well in this poem. The twist the poem takes completely caught me off guard.. I was expecting those wonderful three little words.. which made the poem even more heartbreaking.. incredibly well done. rp25 |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Paula I'm so glad this is only fiction for you. A very well writen and expressive poem, and well do I know from experience how this feels. Out of the blue, without any idea of what was happening I walked right into this situation. Still there's no cast iron guarentees for any of us, and each of us must find our own path. Love your writing Paula always, take care Marsha |
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