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The path not taken lies well worn...
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The path not taken lies well worn... |
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EWDrake Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 183NC, USA 
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Inertia The path not taken lies well worn as dawning birth of day is torn from reality’s grasp as she passes. With footprints crushing tender grasses though mourning's weeds are placed aside and further dirge hence forth denied. Spaced years apart within a heart vowing day’s kiss shall not depart to leave more shadow in my wake nor by the throat my reality shake. In eagerness to seek mine own path I misplace the wisdom which I hath with angst collected from my past as with too eager glee new die was cast. Now rose glasses to the sun reflect as I protect with full respect that which mind seeks not to see yet fills a void too deep to be. When screaming care was placed aside, Kismet bade to her carrousel ride. Worlds spun past in glorious haze from eager touch of halcyon days. As Inertia meets Fate to break her stride innocent worlds slam to full collide. Ticket takers on the corner bark reaching for stubs in our dark. Now in twilight’s haze I awake while dreamer’s hopes gently break free to reach across time and space to touch the cheek of love’s sweet face. The day is done, Eve settles in allowing for the eternal spin of her axis to paint day with night, bathing the world in dark delight. You look into my heart to see if you affect my reality. My answer is clear as I draw you near. Do you read my mind Or have you lived your life With your ear pressed against my wall? We are a joining of soul, two halves seeking to be whole. We meet and instantly know more than passion will soon grow. The words long spoken haunt me still like candle’s flicker on mind’s sill. My soul lies in pieces -- Scattered through so many rooms -- To be gathered with tender hands, Intent on gently rebuilding a mind, And quietly handing it back to me, Wrapped in understanding, One softly spoken word at a time. Reaching across time and space I feel your hand along my face [This message has been edited by EWDrake (edited 08-03-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
EWDrake~ Oh, my gosh ! This is a stunning piece ! I've read and enjoyed it twice and intend to do it again. 'My soul lies in pieces -- Scattered through so many rooms -- To be gathered with tender hands, Intent on gently rebuilding a mind, And quietly handing it back to me, Wrapped in understanding, One softly spoken word at a time.' How very lovely. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I agree! This is magnificent writing! It drew me in and pulled me along and I was at the end before I realized it! Just wonderful! Denise |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
This was purely elegant from start to end. Your words, as always, leave me mesmerized. Another pleasing read. Thank You Jenn E |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I salute this magnificent poem. It has one of the greatest first lines I have seen and then it gets better....... |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
wonderful as always..Evan...and keeps one always thinking of many things...including how one can write so beautifully ~~soft smiles M |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i have a secret to tell you... for a while, i've been wondering why i spend so much time on this site... sometimes, i feel i should be out doing other more "important" things... but.... this... this is why... this poem is so very vividly perfect in meter and flow and imagery... it's fabulous!!! i come here.... so that every now and then, i might be privileged to find a piece like this and an author who has written this type of art.... i will look for more of your work... i'm not familiar with it but.... i will be... and i can't wait!!! BRAVO!!!!! *STANDING TO APPLAUD* |
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EWDrake Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 183NC, USA |
Marge, what a warm response! To read it once is flattering, more than once…thank you…* S* Denise, better to be pulled along here than the transit system where thou art right now! Thank you for the generous response. Here’s hoping normalcy claims you again soon. Jenn E, I am honoured, m’lady! BalladeerThank you Sir…laughing…means a lot from the originator of the forum transit system! Maureen, just to keep one thinking is something well worth the effort. Thank you, quiet one. Doreen, Wow! Totally blown away. Thank you for the privilege of entertaining you if but for a moment it time! Once again, thank you one and all, Evan With a long held breath given dark freedom, the single flame in sorrow's window flickers out. ~EWD~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wonderfully done! |
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