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If I Were Going to Need You
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If I Were Going to Need You |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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If I Were Going to Need You If I were going to need you ‘Twould be in a gentle breeze Beyond the field of windlestraw Beneath the willow trees Beside the quiet tranquil pond Where we would sit and read Your poems of life and love to me If this were true my need If I were going to need you It would be forevermore On feathery wisps of summer wind We’d love and laugh once more You’d be right here beside me In the comfort of my bed Whispering love notes to a song Left spinning in my head If I were going to need you ‘Twould be on a night like this As moonlight streams across the room To beg a lover’s kiss If some day I should feel the want To be with you, somehow If I were going to need you It would be right here and now Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 09-21-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
No time like the present....excellent response to the challenge...and brilliantly penned by your magical quill.  ...do so love seeing your name pop up for us to read. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"If I were going to need you It would be right here and now" Simply beautiful Liz ... I loved the ending lines! Challenge met with a golden pen. Take care me twin!  Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
this is exquisite, and so passionate, I'm just in awe of these words, so much talent. beautiful can not even begin to define. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
"If some day I should feel the want To be with you, somehow If I were going to need you It would be right here and now" All beautiful as always - but especially this last verse where you transit from "some day" to "right here and now" |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Elizabeth.... I so enjoy the beauty and grace with which you write!! Your words just flow. I think this is so wonderful!! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Rosebud said it best. You could tell this came straight from the heart. Love Sy |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Glad to see you Liz...no one does it quite like you... |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is beautiful Liz...what lovely imagery you cloth your feelings in! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Liz, like a breath of spring in the mid of winter, like a summer's day with the same wind gently cool. Loved the thread and sense of this one. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
This is a very lovely description of your love for someone. It is so inviting. How could they resist? Melton |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"On feathery wisps of summer winds we'd love and laugh once more." I like this image of love and romance...especially the laughing...James |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
WOW! This is beautifully written. You captured the idea and mood very well. Challenge well met, and thanks for accepting.  |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
No challenge is a challenge for you, Liz ') |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautifully done, as always, Elizabeth! Denise |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Simply wonderful Elizabeth. . . Wonderful tale told here. . . --------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Incredibly sweet, loving, and wonderful Elizabeth...well done, I really liked this! *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
I'm only going 2 say DITTO 2 what Balladeer has expressed N I shall place my expression on this post after reading your poem this is what it does... U r 'sooooo' GIFTED [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 09-22-2000).] |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Oh Liz So wonderfully penned and expressed, this piece is absolutely beautiful...well done Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I'm so happy to see you taking a bit of your very valuable time to spend with us - I know that you NEED to be with your loved one(s) for awhile.... and we'll accept a smattering of your words of wisdom from time to time... God Bless..  |
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