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Won't I?
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Won't I? |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Won’t I There are so many quiet questions in each minute, can you answer? Can you even know intent when so quickly gray melts into blue? And soon hunger turns to desperation, turns and questions what to fill with, should it be music? I play my life across the piano ‘til the keys burn. Or I could read all the vibrant words thrown like baubles dangling their passion’s eye in thoughts that cause pondering, that dance with heavy breathing, that tear my nonchalance. I could wait for you darling, wait for you to search my face for meaning and find it crouched and streaming, but to wait means coming home and I am too tired to drain the night with some lonely vigil. I could walk the moon, dangle my shadow across the lawn as I nestled with the street light, cover myself in stars there and if I closed my eyes the dew would touch me with the tenderness I yearn. Awe but I will spread these thoughts instead across the miles that pour out truth and capture a smile that melts me to a slow simmer and then I will be full, won’t I? |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Martie As for you last verse, that depends... Hopefully you will be full. Garfield |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Yea, and I sure do like the way your piano keys are on fire. Lucky |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Responding as I'd like is difficult - Let me say There are times I am so full Sometimes with awe Sometimes gray Sometimes blue I must sit at the piano And what comes from the keys May be soft May be transporting But carries me across miles Until I close my eyes And hear the voice That bakes my heart Thank you for posting this  |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
So will you???....yes I think you will!!! I do so love it when you are getting full and in doing so you treat us to an exquisite meal of your words. You do shine so well in all you touch. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
garfield--I guess part of life is the filling and emptying...happens every day in so many ways...thanks for your reply, I appreciate you reading my poem. lucky--hi...I miss your sweet music, man...where have you been? Bill--thank you for your wonderful poetic response! Mark--How is it you always manage to make me feel so special?? Do cowboys learn how to do that in cowboy school? Hugs! |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
love the way you worked this down to the last question....hearts that search, some day will be full, but the day, I guess we never get to know great writing |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I could wait for you darling, wait for you to search my face for meaning and find it crouched and streaming, but to wait means coming home and I am too tired to drain the night with some lonely vigil. Awe but I will spread these thoughts instead across the miles that pour out truth and capture a smile that melts me to a slow simmer and then I will be full, won’t I? A tough question Martie, I hope you find the answer. Wonderfully written piece. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"I play my life across the piano ‘til the keys burn." "I could walk the moon, dangle my shadow across the lawn as I nestled with the street light," Oh Martie ... you imagery is simply fantastic ... I could read you all day, and what pictures I'd see, beautifully woven thoughts! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Martie, wonderful imagery... |
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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Oh Martie, Your words just fill my life with simply beautiful images. This is just wonderful. Bonnie |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Martie, I think a heart such as yours must be trully full to write this way.... Parker |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
quote: and then you said, "and I will be full/Won't I? Martie, let me ask you this... just how long have you been living in my head????? geez... this is really fine writing, girl! awed, i'm sure  |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Corazon--maybe you are right, but you know, I like to search...and I don't think I'll ever be full. brian--some questions just keep on asking. Kit--thank you so much for your enthusiasm...I'm so glad you liked my imagery. Sunshine--I'm glad you liked the imagery as well. Bonnie--Your replies are always so heart felt...thank you. Parker--I fill up and empty...that is why I write and sing and play...thanks Doreen--I have thought the same when reading your poetry...so glad you saw it too. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderful writing, Martie! Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ 'I could walk the moon, dangle my shadow across the lawn as I nestled with the street light' Imagery so real ... it walks across the night with such easiness. Beautiful, lady ... just beautiful. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Denise and Marge--You guys are always the best at posting replies...thank you for always being there and for being such good friends!! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
The thought of being "full" has a bittersweet feel to it...seen in one view it is complete...in another..there is nothing left...hmmmmm you cause me to ponder...lol Beautiful work...thank you for sharing your gift of weave with all of us~ |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
I loved it a lot!!!!!!! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
wonderfully written and expressed Martie. An absolute pleasure to read. |
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