Open Poetry #9 |
Cruise Control.... |
Balladeer
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Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I never have liked cruise control - I feel so insecure With no foot on the pedal I can never feel quite sure My safety is intact, you see, though my hand's on the wheel... The thought may be unjustified but that's just how I feel. My life is now on cruise control and I don't like that, either! It seemed a normal thing to do to give myself a breather But I'm just flying down the road of Life without a goal Without a way to change my lane 'cause I'm on cruise control. I don't speed up....I don't slow down...I cannot even pass Small obstacles because I don't have my foot on the gas. I'm being whisked along as if my life were not my own And, though I'm in the driver's seat, I'm sitting there alone. As I fly down the road toward some future or beyond I worry, should I use my foot, if my life will respond Or did the years I raced with wild abandon take their toll And leave me destined to live out my life on cruise control? [This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 09-20-2000).] |
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ddgoose Member
since 2000-07-25
Posts 250Baltimore, MD, USA |
Balladeer I love it - I like being in control too but every once in a while you have to sit back and watch the world go by. Chill Out as they say. I look forward to reading your work - keep them coming! didi |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
whats that old Billy Ocean song.... GET OUTTA MY DREAMS AND IN TO MY CAR LOL hey scoot over.....Ill drive....you just enjoy the ride...*winkie winkie* ... sometimes it feels this way dont it... ya know..thats when we should either pick up the cute hitchhiker or STOMP IT on the gas and lay some rubber down let the top down..feel the wind in our hair later-cant-drive-55-gator LOL jm |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I've felt like this a time or two...you've expressed it wonderfully! (but of course!) Denise |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
put your pedal to the medal! watch out for that windy road... sometimes pavement starts to settle when we carry too much load. cruising on the highway, Poet, can be dangerous, indeed! sometimes speed and curves don't show it when roadblocks come to impede. fly on down the superhighway, cruise can be alright, y'know... say outloud, "I Did it My Way" when speed limits get too low. ********* whoops! you inspired me... !!! as always, Michael.. i LOVE your poetry! |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Ah Michael, you had me smiling from the first line through! Quite a feeling it is, to be automated and running life's course without a goal ... hmmmm, I know that one a little too well. Perhaps it's time to shift gears and wing it! What do ya say?!? Loved this Balladeer! Best wishes, /Kit |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
You're cruising down the highway, You've selected cruise control. Will you please get outta my way? You're on the wrong side of the road! Besides, I didn't know cruise control kicked in at 5 mph - lol. BTW - I really enjoyed your metaphor for losing direction in life. Great writing, too, Mike. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
So speed up will ya......we won't stop ya one bit...matter of fact we will thank you. Very ingenious metaphor and I tend to agree with you....once we get in a pattern that feels comfortable then it is hard to go out and take those chances we deserve to take. Great write from you sir but of course we all know that when we come in to read you. |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
I would have to agree with Mark. We all know what to expect when we walk in your door. Some more brilliant poetry. Dee |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Balladeer This one I thought I would get a laugh But when reading, I realized that I've felt this way too. I've often traveled down the roads of time with my life on cruise. I seriously thought that you were about to write a famous pun. Just to get back at that new poet, Melton and the old pirate, LngJhn. One day Melton had you crash your car and guess who you hit; LngJhn. They had you drink a toast to a "Miracle" and then waited for the police to come. They really set you up this night when you were taking a salutary cruise They left you holding the bottle and knew the police would smell the booze. Check out the poem by Melton L. Culberth title "It's A Miracle"< !signature--> Garfield [This message has been edited by ggrn3 (edited 09-21-2000).] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Mr. 'Deer'..... Just look at it this way...the cruise control leaves you free to do more important things!!! Great poem...loved it! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ Sweetheart - you could cruise my highway any day of the week ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Y'know...I could relate to this, and I don't even drive...smiles to ya...'cause you're just THAT good!!! |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
So... You running on high test???.. I thought I saw you cruising down A1A - It was you, I'm sure of it.. I really like this one, m'deer... |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow do I know what you mean...was thinking of writing of this same thing....but I like your metaphor better....this is great |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Don't tell me you've been tolled...LOL...as always, another 'Deer-ific piece... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Deer, I thought this piece was going to be a kicker, then you moved me with wondrous words, surprising synergy, and elegant emotion. Not fair! But on the other hand I though the poem was and is wonderful. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Totally awesome metaphor, my "deer!" Just watch out now for them tunnels!!! Corinne |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
LOL!! Great responses from you all. This place is so much fun to write for! Thank you all for cruisin' along |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Please, please don't forget to buckle up! Kathleen |
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