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If I Were Going To Need You
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If I Were Going To Need You |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets 
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If I were going to need you, You might be the last to know. For if I were going to need you, I'd never tell you so. Instead I'd be the picture of perfect, Knowing exactly what to do. I'd dance you in spinning circles You'd beg my love when I'm through. I'd never have to admit it, I'd never have to confess. Unless of course you discover I'd do anything when you wear that dress. *mischevious grins* Even with a lot of imagination, does it make the story less true? |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Great ending Masked Intruder ... much enjoyed this one!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
ha ha...i loved this one.. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Masked Intruder, I enjoyed this post, I especially liked the twist at the end. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
So bold and strong until you showed your true colours at the end! Loved it. Dee |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
MI... Impressive writing you got me smiling at the end... This poem brought back a not too long ago sweet memory... Thanks for sharing Coco |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Powerful beggining with a most perfect ending......... Ahhhhhh.....the power of beauty....hehehe Great read here! Mischevious Grin's........arn't they great....Jenn E  |
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Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
How very like you to respond with something like this. I enjoyed the way you met this challenge. Geesh...So you'd play hard to get. Go figure.  Good to see you around here! ((HUGS)) |
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CAMERON UNDERWOOD Junior Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 26 |
That must be some dress. I paticularly enjoyed this one. Very well written. I loved the ending. Sleepless in Portland |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Shhhhhh... Don't expose your weakness! LOL!! Great poem, wonderful ending. I enjoyed this one a lot! Trev. |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
Masked Intruder I do believe you're quite dashing and bold behind that mask! |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
hey MI!whoops! geez, i get so excited to see you, i start yelling... hehe this is very cool...i love the dress line!!!.. *g now... get back to hitting those books! (it's ok, though, to sneak in a little web action on occasion, write a little verse, come back and see us and all that good stuff... in fact, i ENCOURAGE it! *wink*) |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
love this very honest, very real, made me smile |
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