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Tara Simms
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Honea Path, SC USA

0 posted 2000-09-19 11:04 PM



As I Lay Sleeping

Last night as I lay sleeping
You held me in your arms
I felt your breath in my hair
your hand at my waist
and I knew all was right with my world

Last night as I lay sleeping
I dreamed of happy ever after
You were there—
Dancing barefoot with me on the beach
Splashing me in the surf
and I smiled a dreamy smile.

Last night as I lay sleeping
I heard you whisper your heart:
“Someday I want you to be my wife”
My eyes flew open as my heart skipped a beat
With my breath in my throat
I replied “Someday I will be”
And I knew it would be so.


© Copyright 2000 Tara Simms - All Rights Reserved
snowpants
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1 posted 2000-09-19 11:46 PM


I loved it!  So passionately romantic!  Great poem!

sp  

Dee
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2 posted 2000-09-20 06:11 AM


Tara, this is the first of your poems I have found and I loved it. I think I'll have to look for some more.
Dee

Sven
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3 posted 2000-09-20 12:26 PM


Tara!!  Where have you been??  Dreaming and dancing I see. . .  

This is absoultely beautiful. . . it's just wonderful when you know isn't it?  I wish you all the best my friend. . .  

-------------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Kit McCallum
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4 posted 2000-09-20 12:34 PM


Wonderful Tara! It's nice to read you again ... what a sweetly phrased conclusion to this poem ... loved the ending!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Tara Simms
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since 1999-08-12
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Honea Path, SC USA
5 posted 2000-09-20 06:30 PM


Thanks for the "rave" reviews!

Sven, I think you jinxed me. This is the first thing I've written since the duet we wrote.

Dee, hopefully now that my muse has returned, I will be posting more often.  I just love getting new "fans".   )  I believe my website is listed in my profile, I'd love to have you stop by and visit!

Kit, and it's so nice to be read!  Thanks for stopping by.

Snowpants, thank you for reading!


Take me as I am or watch me as I go

jwesley
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Spring, Texas
6 posted 2000-09-20 10:03 PM


Wonderful and romantic piece Tara...ejoyed it much.

jwesley

brian madden
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ireland
7 posted 2000-09-21 02:12 PM


Tender piece... oh sigh very romantic enjoyed the read.

My view stretches out from the fence to the wall No words could explain, no actions determine Just watching the trees and the leaves as they fall:Joy

Tara Simms
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Honea Path, SC USA
8 posted 2000-09-22 12:57 PM


jwesley and Brian, thanks for the comments!

Take me as I am or watch me as I go

Irie
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since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State
9 posted 2000-09-22 01:06 AM


Tara,
How wonderful to be so happy!
Great dream and wonderful post.
Maybe all your dreams come true  


~Sheri

kitkat
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since 2000-01-11
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Nova Scotia
10 posted 2000-09-22 11:35 AM


Oh this was great. Nothing Like hearing words from the heart as you lay sleeping.
startin_fresh
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11 posted 2000-09-22 08:39 PM


Tara:

As always I find your writing impeccable. You have been an inspiration to me to continue to write when I thought I could write no more.  

Thank you
Shawn


Butterflies_dont_cry
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12 posted 2000-09-22 10:56 PM


Tara* This is so romantic and beautiful....I loved it!!
Tara Simms
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Honea Path, SC USA
13 posted 2000-09-23 12:38 PM


Shawn, thank you for the wonderful compliment.

Irie, Butterflies_don't_cry, thank you for enjoying my poem.

kitkat, it was the perfect moment to share with my honey.

rascalx
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since 1999-08-25
Posts 590
Florence, SC, USA
14 posted 2000-09-25 02:26 AM


Tara,

     I blush so brightly every time I read this poem. You took a secret little piece of my heart and made it into a beautiful glimpse of the love we have together. And to all of the readers who commented, especially you men, don't EVER think that women don't hear you when they are asleep. They hear every word you say!

passing shadows
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15 posted 2004-06-07 12:47 PM


precious
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