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Twilight Sleep |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Twilight SleepAt day's commence into surcease this twilight sleep of in between My futile feign cannot release your tender touch, the ache of dream The moon, as if my senses' sage lends traces of its ivory light A fire to fall upon the page A poem this night alone shall write I feel your breathing's ebb and rush and hear the murmur of your moans Along my back, your fingers brush Upon my neck your kisses roam And I, transported, linger there within the realm of reverie Between asleep and mind's aware your arms, my love, embracing me |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire~ So lovely and so longingly done. I'm caught up in the twilight of your dream. 'I feel your breathing's ebb and rush and hear the murmur of your moans Along my back, your fingers brush Upon my neck your kisses roam' So sensually lovely. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Claire - Where do students who want to write with such supurb sensuality enroll? - I want to line up now and be first |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Claire, I love it...."Along my back, your fingers brush Upon my neck your kisses roam"...so sensual...such longing....beautifully written, dear one. Michael Proust- "Love is space and time measured by the heart" |
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grandiloquent Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 104Midwest America |
I am so glad I took an extra minute to skim through a few recent adittions. Meadowmuse, this is FABULOUS. A perfect display of the subtle diference between Sensual and Sexy. This is soft, alluring, and so lightly arousing. The imagery is amazing, the descriptions beautiful, and the rhythm is perfect. If I could pluck out favorite lines without selecting the entire poem, I would rewrite them here to show you. This will be a constant re-read. Superb! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Marge, thank you...twilight sleep has always fascinated me...those magical moments between slumber and awake. Naturally, it's something of an inspiring time, as well.  Bill, you could most likely teach the class. Thank you for the smile. Michael, what can I say but thank you? Your encouragement always means so much to me. grandiloquent, I thank you for such positive commentary, and invite you to read any of my other pieces posted here...you may find them to your liking as well. Thank you, sincerely, for letting me know you enjoyed this, and welcome to Passions. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
*sigh* Claire, I don't know what's inspiring you these days. . . but don't lose it! This poem has just made my day. . . it's so subtle and sensual. . . just wonderful. . . ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Breath-taking Claire! Incredibly tender and sensual sentiments ... what a beautiful flow to your words as always, excellent piece! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
this is my kind of poem haa..love it.. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Lovely...lovely... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I could have sworn I replied to this and I KNOW I have read it....so let me tell you....I love this piece and it is so sensual and it has embraced me. Superb penning from you as usual |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire--I echo those above...so softly sensual..this side of you has been shining lately...I love it! |
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Dom Mart Member
since 1999-08-17
Posts 164Florida |
So well-crafted yet so full of feeling, rhythm and sensuality. It has the touch. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
And I, transported, linger there within the realm of reverie Between asleep and mind's aware your arms, my love, embracing me So much can be said in a simple tender embrace, beautiful Claire, very beautiful. My view stretches out from the fence to the wall No words could explain, no actions determine Just watching the trees and the leaves as they fall:Joy |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very lovely, Claire! Soooo beautiful! Denise |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I always love to read your poems aloud Claire, because they are so incredibly beautiful to hear...this is tender, yet seems to ring with a hint of sorrow...absolutely wondrous work. *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
You have described perfectly the best time of the day. Beautifully done. |
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