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3am Ache
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3am Ache |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
**repost from 7 by request... (new forum to "christen")   ~3 am Ache~ The crisp night air licks my skin ... even it cant cool this ache with in. I can feel you here in the midnight air, mouth on mine, fingers tangled in my hair. The dark of night sky cant contain this desire, consumed by this need, your touch is all I require. Under star lit heavens and moon swept sky ... I dream of the moment that next to you, I might lie. Star light, star bright ... might I have this wish tonight ... to feel his body beside mine ... holding me tight. Kisses so hard that it leaves him weak ... caresses that share the pleasures we both seek. A desire so strong ... the moon would fade in the afterglow ... a need so intense ... until satisfied ... it can only grow. Night brings in this ache so deep, it takes my breath away, Somehow, some way ... I am going to make this fantasy see light of day. Janet Marie |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
You ache beautifully my dear friend! I love this piece...truly I do~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you, JM---it's just not right without see your name on me screen...Hugs to you...sleep is a toss-up for me t'nite...so that was perfect!!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wow! Powerful ache here...you have even made me hurt...this is a such a heart render. |
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Michael G Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579Nashville |
AHhhh my poet in heart, such words are they.... |
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Dragon's Soul Junior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 25 |
Words escape me..... Images flood my mind my heart aches i'm trully touched by your poem |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Hon----this ain't playin hard to get... The crisp night air licks my skin ... even it cant cool this ache with in. I can feel you here in the midnight air, mouth on mine, fingers tangled in my hair. The dark of night sky cant contain this desire, consumed by this need, your touch is all I require. Under star lit heavens and moon swept sky ... I dream of the moment that next to you, I might lie. Star light, star bright ... might I have this wish tonight ... to feel his body beside mine ... holding me tight. Kisses so hard that it leaves him weak ... caresses that share the pleasures we both seek. and as for the fantasy seeing the light of day...where do you want me?ROFLOL  A desire so strong ... the moon would fade in the afterglow ... a need so intense ... until satisfied ... it can only grow. Night brings in this ache so deep, it takes my breath away, Somehow, some way ... I am going to make this fantasy see light of day. BEAUTIFUL sentiment girl and you have one flaming muse to be able to put this to post. Truely hot and I feel your desire.  [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 07-31-2000).] |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Very very beautiful. Jon |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
I'll always love this one Janny Thanks for the re post  Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent Janet Marie! That ache comes though loud and clear ... wonderful! Best wishes, /Kit |
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EWDrake Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 183NC, USA |
M'lady, with this you stir an ache more than your own, no doubt. You paint well with images to sketch your intent before mind's eye. Wonderfully well crafted. I have my own 3AM posing which I did months ago, but I did mine in prose. The similarities are striking, though mine is of a bit different point of view. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
If you're determined then it's gonna work out for ya.....It's a marvelous night for a moondance....you know the rest.......a fantabulous night to make romance...oh the night is magic......can I just have one more moondance with you my love.......You got that my dearest poet friend.....oh the night will be magic..one more moondance......that's what he's going to say before you succumb to the strength of his love.... Whew! hot stuff JM you're the greatest.....ethome... I'll post it next.... |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Janet Marie~ My dear friend, now you have me aching! This is truly lovely. And if I know you half as good as I think I do......you will make this fantasy see the light of day! Love Ya~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
wow...is there anything i can say but..wow. another gem Eveagator. "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
If you figure out how to make such fantasy a reality, would you PLEASE send me the directions??? LOL. This is great!! Well done, JM! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Whoa! Know this real well. Fabulously written. jwesley |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
I remember this one. Fantasy are wonderful things, but somehow you always wake to reality. Life sucks!!!!!! Oh......by the way, How is ........Gem??  LOL You I couldn't resist the temptation!!!!! Marina < !signature--> It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley [This message has been edited by Marina (edited 07-31-2000).] |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
JM, This was beautiful my friend......Loved it the first time and still do!!! I can feel the ache of longing. Oh how we can relate my friend. Hang in there. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I had this ache that would not go away so I came by to relieve it some. Still love the sensuality in this on. Always will.  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Loved this especially the beginning. Somehow and someway I'm hoping all your beautiful dreams come true...se ya la ter alle gator...looks like French...huh...James |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
Hi there as always a masterpiece in your work my own eyes are opened as in the night in you enfolded my perfect love in motion The moon takes me to you the morning still tommorow far from its sorrows the night holds the promise of all days coming here next to you The motion sways and rocking moans of pleasure mocking the love i am unlocking in the moonlight tunes my words lost in the darkness all past heart felt the physical makes me long forever after you To one who will always be my muse From Walter. Oh Danny boy, the pipes, the pipes are calling From glen to glen, and down the mountain side The summer's gone, and all the roses falling 'Tis |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
A desire so strong ... the moon would fade in the afterglow ... a need so intense ... until satisfied ... it can only grow. Night brings in this ache so deep, it takes my breath away, Somehow, some way ... I am going to make this fantasy see light of day. .... WOW is all I can manage... regards, sudhir |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Had to come back and re-read this, jm. Much warm applause. jwesley |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I am having computer problems that is making it almost impossible at times to reply or post, so before I lose another attempt I would like to say thank you to ALL of you for such enthusiastic, and most enjoyable responses. For the WOW's and such, i am smiling and grateful for those who came back for seconds ... i am most complimented and blushing LOLto sweet walter I say thank you so very much for the beautiful verse ... and most of all for allowing me to inspire your words of grace. It is an honor to be your muse. thank you, truly thanks again to all here later-sensual-gators jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Treasures I find this morning...this is...well...go for it girl...make it happen |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Oh Janet...here's another "wow" to add to all these others! (while fanning some of the guys in here) You have much to fill me in on, so show your face already! hehe Miss you! Computer problems over? |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
JM.... 3AM is a good time to be sitting here reading, which is what I was doing this morn!! This is magnificent, and so beautifully written...... Thank you for bringing this one back for us!!< !signature--> Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! [This message has been edited by Sunny1 (edited 08-14-2000).] |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
I know the ache I swear!!! You describe it all too well...nicely writtne.... Julie :) |
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ddgoose Member
since 2000-07-25
Posts 250Baltimore, MD, USA |
Janet Marie Your ache is soooo real - I can feel the pain. Great reading and I am glad you brought it back. didi |
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