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Mike
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0 posted 2000-09-17 11:49 PM


Half heard murmers in the night,
Through muted realms of space,
Amid the stars in heaven's flight,
On shrouded sails in pain's deface,
Adrift upon the Southern Cross,
Upon this great and silent sea,
As on night's deck, the tempests toss,
I cry out, in anguished plea,
To those above, hold high your lights,
That I might see my way,
Lead me from my yesternights,
That I might find my way.

[This message has been edited by Mike (edited 09-18-2000).]

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Martie
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1 posted 2000-09-18 12:28 PM


Mike--I feel anguish in you words so few, yet so deep and powerful...sending more hugs!
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2 posted 2000-09-18 01:26 AM


Mike~
A tenderly touching piece with an urgency about it.

'I cry out, in anguished plea,
To those above, hold high your lights,
That I might see my way,
Lead me from my yesternights,
That I might find my way.'


Poignant plea.
I'm with Martie .... *Hugs*.
~*Marge*~


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Nan
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3 posted 2000-09-18 07:27 AM


Mike, I love this - I couldn't figure out if I was floating among the stars or sailing upon vast oceans... But then - They're really one and the same, aren't they???... Nice job as usual, my friend..
Janet Marie
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4 posted 2000-09-18 09:19 AM


Amid the stars in heaven's flight,
On shrouded sails in pain's deface,
Adrift upon the Southern Cross,
Upon this great and silent sea,
As on night's deck, the tempests toss,
I cry out, in anguished plea,
To those above, hold high your lights,
-------------------
Mike...
this is such an exceptional piece of work...
the vocabulary, rhyme and cadence are of perfection ...
as it the imagery .
Then you add to it the depth of the expression of emotion..
so much given to the reader in just a few amazing lines...
as always I envy and enjoy the grace of your talents and gift.
I relate to these emotions more than I care to admit these days
take care
jm

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