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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2000-09-17 01:06 PM

Back to school shopping, Saturday at the mall
Stopped to rest and leaned against the florist’s wall
Then I smelled the pure sweet summer smell
Roses and Jasmine  - I knew them both so well.

I closed my eyes and could see your face
Smiling at me in that long ago place
Though no longer young, our passion was real
You were the one who taught me to feel

Remembering now that summer of sin
Marriage forgotten, thoughts rushing in
We bathed in the light of tropical nights
Taking our pleasure in sweet love’s delights

I was flying home to tell him I must leave
Having finally found love, as you led me to believe
Then I found the note you had put in my purse
I read it quickly, then sighed with a curse

Jasmine blossoms floated from the page
You said we should remember to act our age
We weren’t young and foolish, you explained
Our affair was ended before I deplaned

I opened my mind, pushed those thoughts away
To remember the pain that I felt that day
Knowing life is not full of roses it seems
I must forget you and those Jasmine dreams.

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1 posted 2000-09-17 01:08 PM

very beautifully written..  
Mark Bohannan
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2 posted 2000-09-17 01:12 PM

You may not have time to post in open very much but when you do you make it well worth the wait.  Excellent verse from me say superbly penned...yeah that's it.  
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3 posted 2000-09-17 01:24 PM

PdV, Wow, beautiful read from first to last, I could almost smell the Jasmine... Bonnie
Jenn E
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4 posted 2000-09-17 01:36 PM

This is the first time I have had the pleasure to read you.......and I am so glad I did. Memories...they do have a way of creeping in, usually when we least expect it.
Warm Smiles
Jenn E

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5 posted 2000-09-17 03:25 PM

Dreams never die. . . we kill them. . .

Superb my friend. . .


That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2000-09-17 03:47 PM

Poet deVine,
Oh devine one you did it again
You made you a tear with your pen.
Excellent my dear. Sy

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
7 posted 2000-09-17 04:32 PM

Hi Poet deVine,
This is absolutely stunning, and I salute you on your masterpiece. I just loved it, and the smoothness with which it flowed. Lovely, just lovely.


Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
8 posted 2000-09-17 06:24 PM

Thank you all for your kind comments. Writing is hard when you have so many things going on in your life. I finally set aside some time for this poem. Hope to get back into the swing of things and read and reply more soon! Thanks.
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9 posted 2000-09-17 07:39 PM

Ooohhh. Pretty. Made me think of the song "Strawberry Wine" by Deanna Carter and I love that song. Guess that why I loved your poem so much. So nice to read your poetry again...

Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go.

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10 posted 2000-09-17 07:54 PM


I caught a whiff of those Jasmine-scented dreams ...
a bouquet of memories held in a special place.

Funny, the scents of life that beckon us to recall ...
I enjoyed the overall nostalgic memory-theme of this.

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~

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11 posted 2000-09-17 08:31 PM

Excellent expression, Sharon. I could feel the pain in the words. Great writing!


Wilfred Yeats
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12 posted 2000-09-17 09:05 PM

would have could have should have
or is it
shouldn't ?

no one in their right one wants to be in my mind right now - am I making sense? I hope you understand the thousand thoughts and feelings you've generated  with this supurb poem

Member Rara Avis
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13 posted 2000-09-17 11:45 PM

Ah, the scent drifted right off the page!
(we need a nose icon here haha)

Start to finish it was wonderful! Beautiful beginning, and a sad ending. So true to life    Great job Sharon!

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14 posted 2000-09-17 11:59 PM

Great work, deVine one. Funny how smells can trigger memories like nothing else...

LOL@WhtDove and her nose icon  

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15 posted 2000-09-18 07:04 AM

This is a great poem, PdV - If only we could write the course of love, eh?... and btw... We aim to please around here...

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16 posted 2000-09-18 07:55 AM

~You caught me with the title..I knew this would be fantastic. And, yep, it certainly was....Such a lovely piece!!~< !signature-->


[This message has been edited by Beth (edited 09-18-2000).]

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17 posted 2000-09-18 09:44 AM

This is lovely as ever PdV---and ya got me with the Jasmine of my favorite essential oils...beautifully written memory...(fiction of course) and by the way, were you aware that the nose contains erectile tissue?  (fun fact!)  serenity exits...sniffing....
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18 posted 2000-09-19 09:34 AM

This is filled with sadness... but so lovely!
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