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Jasmine Dreams
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Jasmine Dreams |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Back to school shopping, Saturday at the mall Stopped to rest and leaned against the florist’s wall Then I smelled the pure sweet summer smell Roses and Jasmine - I knew them both so well. I closed my eyes and could see your face Smiling at me in that long ago place Though no longer young, our passion was real You were the one who taught me to feel Remembering now that summer of sin Marriage forgotten, thoughts rushing in We bathed in the light of tropical nights Taking our pleasure in sweet love’s delights I was flying home to tell him I must leave Having finally found love, as you led me to believe Then I found the note you had put in my purse I read it quickly, then sighed with a curse Jasmine blossoms floated from the page You said we should remember to act our age We weren’t young and foolish, you explained Our affair was ended before I deplaned I opened my mind, pushed those thoughts away To remember the pain that I felt that day Knowing life is not full of roses it seems I must forget you and those Jasmine dreams. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
very beautifully written..  |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
You may not have time to post in open very much but when you do you make it well worth the wait. Excellent verse from you....no..let me say superbly penned...yeah that's it. |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
PdV, Wow, beautiful read from first to last, I could almost smell the Jasmine... Bonnie |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
This is the first time I have had the pleasure to read you.......and I am so glad I did. Memories...they do have a way of creeping in, usually when we least expect it. Warm Smiles Jenn E |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Dreams never die. . . we kill them. . . Superb my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Poet deVine, Oh devine one you did it again You made you a tear with your pen. Excellent my dear. Sy |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi Poet deVine, This is absolutely stunning, and I salute you on your masterpiece. I just loved it, and the smoothness with which it flowed. Lovely, just lovely. Bill |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all for your kind comments. Writing is hard when you have so many things going on in your life. I finally set aside some time for this poem. Hope to get back into the swing of things and read and reply more soon! Thanks. |
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Cuddlez Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422Walla Walla, WA 99362 |
Ooohhh. Pretty. Made me think of the song "Strawberry Wine" by Deanna Carter and I love that song. Guess that why I loved your poem so much. So nice to read your poetry again... Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PoetdeVine~ I caught a whiff of those Jasmine-scented dreams ... a bouquet of memories held in a special place. Funny, the scents of life that beckon us to recall ... I enjoyed the overall nostalgic memory-theme of this. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent expression, Sharon. I could feel the pain in the words. Great writing! Denise |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
would have could have should have or is it shouldn't ? no one in their right one wants to be in my mind right now - am I making sense? I hope you understand the thousand thoughts and feelings you've generated with this supurb poem |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Ah, the scent drifted right off the page! (we need a nose icon here haha) Start to finish it was wonderful! Beautiful beginning, and a sad ending. So true to life Great job Sharon! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Great work, deVine one. Funny how smells can trigger memories like nothing else... LOL@WhtDove and her nose icon |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is a great poem, PdV - If only we could write the course of love, eh?... and btw... We aim to please around here...  |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~You caught me with the title..I knew this would be fantastic. And, yep, it certainly was....Such a lovely piece!!~< !signature--> ~Cherie~ [This message has been edited by Beth (edited 09-18-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is lovely as ever PdV---and ya got me with the Jasmine too...one of my favorite essential oils...beautifully written memory...(fiction of course) and by the way, were you aware that the nose contains erectile tissue? (fun fact!) serenity exits...sniffing.... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is filled with sadness... but so lovely! |
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