Open Poetry #9 |
the Need |
Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Walk into my arms.... I will keep you safe and warm.. When the clouds begin to gather.. I'm your shelter from the storm.... Lay your body down.... I will ease your cares away.. I will be right here beside you.. Be it night or day.... Look into my eyes.... I will show you what's inside.. You can read my every thought, my love.. I have nothing there to hide.... Taste my waiting lips.... Let me kiss you with desire Melt the cold and lonely hours.. With the heat of love's sweet fire.... Take me to your heart.... That is where I need to be.. And you will need no longer.. If you give your heart to me.... I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~Sunny~~ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
S1...this had a sing-song to it...like it! Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
yep a groovy kind of song this reads to me... sunny1, excellent... regards, sudhir |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Sunshine.... Yep, I think this would make a nice little song, too. I'm starting to hum the possible melody right now......... Thank you, sis! Hi Sudhir.... Ok.....you knew this was a song right away, now didn't you? Thank you for liking it!!!!!! I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~Sunny~~ |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
ah, seems lately ive been searching out your poems, i do enjoy them much! and this one is no exception, well written, flowing, with its sensual bits as well....loved it! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
poutprincess.... The feeling is mutual, my friend, as your writing is wonderful!!! I thank you very much for reading this and also your kind words!! I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Wow, the promise of song along with all the promises within your verse. Busy-busy-busy you are. Wonderful write and nice rythmic flow. |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
Sunny1, If there was ever a poem that I connected with and felt within this is it. I loved it completely. I would even try and pick the best but its all too great. Penned perfectly. |
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Spirit2572 Junior Member
since 2000-07-29
Posts 15 |
I like this poem... it reads so easily and rhythmic. Spirit2572 |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful Sunny! These sweet and tender lyrics flow softly through these beautiful lines. So nicely penned! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Mark... Glad you liked my rythm!!, and the words.....thank you!! Hi Beth... You are always so nice in your replies, and I am just glad this made you feel good. Thank you!! Hi Spirit...Nice to meet you, and thank you very much for reading!! Hi Kit... It is always so good to get your input! I appreciate your reply and thank you also for reading my work..... I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sunny, Sunny, All I can say, is OK. Take me to your heart.... That is where I need to be.. And you will need no longer.. If you give your heart to me.... |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Bill.... Ahhh...you do have a way with words!!!!! What can I say here, except a most humble 'thank you'? I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sunny--beautiful, sweet and tender words...love filled and flowing. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Martie.. Thank you, and I am really glad that you enjoyed this one!! I'm always glad to see your reply..... I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I can appreciate the needs you have mentioned in this lovely poem or song...James |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hello James.... Your understanding is most welcome, and so is your reply.....I thank you.... A poet can write the words, but they mean nothing if the reader cannot see through to the meaning. Thank you....... I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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ddgoose Member
since 2000-07-25
Posts 250Baltimore, MD, USA |
Sunny Your poems are so gentle and tender. This poem just overflows with it. Reads really nice. |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
I loved this!!!! You have such nice rythym here. A great read! Thank You. Jenn E |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Sunny1. . . This is wonderful!!! Anyone would be very lucky to be taken into your heart. . . Excellent my friend. . . ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
ddgoose...Thank you so much, and I'm truly glad that the gentle part came through! Jenn E...Good...I'm glad to see that this has a rythmic flow, as a song will need that.....Thank you much! Sven...Thank you, thank you....this makes me very happy that you liked it! I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Just Marvelous Darling....and i can never pull that accent off... good thing you can't hear me...Your poem was like poetic magic truely a gift.....A perfect love poem...good writing here.... Julie :) |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
JulieAnn...I can't do that accent, either, (but this icon I use looks like it would fit the accent!! Ha!!) You know, I really do appreciate your kind words...I always welcome the feedback!! I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Sunny, A lovely poem to be sure. Romance is still alive. Nice work! Auguste |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Auguste... Thank you!! Yes, I think romance will be alive as long as artists (that includes writers) keep it that way, don't you? Long live romantics! I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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