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Falling Alone
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Falling Alone |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Just like the etchings On a glass Or the rhythm Of iambic pentameter, I can't deny That I long to stay. Like the cold winds From the month of December Well into March, There's no casting aside This imminently catching passion. I know there are More pressing issues, But, to tell you the truth, I'm not that brave When you're far. I couldn't begin to describe The vulnerability That seems to overcome When you're gone. You can't take The obviousness from the serenity Of a sleeping child, Or the triumph from a champion Whose first victory Has just been won. It's one of those things That require inspiration, The capital letters Of that coveted treasure. All I could say certainly Is that the only way I could fight the dark Is with you Beside me. |
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grandiloquent Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 104Midwest America |
Oh, snowpants, darling, wonderful. This is simple and elegant; the lines seem to wander off briefly then recapture themselves, and the effect is charming. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Thank you grandiloquent! This is my first post, and I was a bit nervous about it! I'm glad you enjoyed! |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Snowpants welcome to Passions. Lovely poem to open with. Juls |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~WOW...I Loved this!! A brilliant first post. I hope to see more of your work in Passions!~ ~Cherie~ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SnowPants~ Welcome to Passions. Quite a nice piece of expression. Enjoy your stay with us. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is a wonderful entree to Passions - Welcome you'll love it here. Check your email for a special greeting..  |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
This is really nice! Deb  |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
a very enjoyable read.... many good lines. welcome! ~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a sincere apology and some decent poetry ~ |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Thank you juliet_2u, Beth, Marge, Nan, BloomingRose, and doreen peri! And thanks, Nan for the greeting card! What a great feature!! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Welcome to our world...what a lovely entrance you have made |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
welcome to the wonderful world of poetry and all of us who grace these pages with our presence.... this is excellent... I will look forward to reading more from you... |
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Cuddlez Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422Walla Walla, WA 99362 |
Nice first poem  )Hope you are not without this person... Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Thanks for reading, Paula Finn, JulieAnn, and Cuddlez. Hope I'm not thanking people too much, but I am loving this opportunity to share my work, and, at the same time, read the everyone else's! |
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