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All That You Are -poem in 2 forms
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All That You Are -poem in 2 forms |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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Sonnet form All my life I've enjoyed beauty Felt my senses reel at God's creation Felt my heart soar high in nature's bounty Then I met you and lost sensation Heard your voice reading your poetry Through your words I knew of your empathy Fell for you then, no eye for sophistry If you were but mine I'd have God's bounty So dream of that day when we last are one. Dream of that day, we'll have so much fun Dream of the day when our passions are free Dreaming of days when you're all that I see Common sense say's "no way" it tells me run, I'm so deeply bound see no way to flee ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Cinquain Form In life I've found beauty Reeled at God's creation Meeting you you're my sensation I love Your voice Your poetry Feeling your empathy Feel no visual sophistry Just love Bounty Full of your love Dreaming of passions free Dream of the day we're together In love |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I hope you're not asking me to choose, smiling now, as everybody seems to know, I always want it all...either way, it's beautiful poetry Wilfred. Thank you for this cool demonstration...hmmm...may have to try this some time. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Bill - I really like these poems... its obvious you work at your writing and compose carefully. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill--so interesting to see this written in two different ways...they are both beautiful! Whoever she is is lucky to have someone feel that way about her. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Serenity- No choice necessary - your gracious reply is more than enough. you will do more than try - you will succeed. and thanks for the "I want it all" it's been years since I heard that - and it brought back great memories. Mike- You should read my efforts a year or more ago. Some of the rewrites show how lazy I was - I hope you'll pardon my pride - but I've found how little an effort it has been to turn a so-so poem into something I'm proud of. Thank you. Martie - I feel I am the lucky one - truly |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Bill, I admire that you are able to share your admiration in such variety of lovely poetic expression. This is exceptional reading. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
You do exceptionally well in all forms! This was a sweet read, one I enjoyed fully  |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Claire- Thank you - kind words from you mean so much because your poetry I hold in such high esteem WhtDove- you are too kind ~S~ - thank you |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Wilfred~ Enjoyed both forms. Isn't it fun to go back and rearrange things ? We should have such pleasure in life. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Again your warmth and passion comes through in both poems Very beautiful Liz |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
hi again... Well I read both poems in style you have penned and my oh my you have such a flair... Honestly this talent you have I as a reader enjoy seeing your 'StuFF' thank U for a lovely read |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Marge - I believe it is always fun to challenge oneself thanks Marge - (who knows - I may challenge others)Liz - As long as I've readers like you who are so kind - I will try to write - thank you Cocobaci- It is a pleasure to write when I know it wll be appreciated - thank you |
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