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Entwined Thoughts - A Poets Duet...
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Entwined Thoughts - A Poets Duet... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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Entwined Thoughts I saw, as a tender reflection in my wishing well of fortune, smiling amid a starry canopy, a young face of the full moon brilliant and bright this face of moon's light lying low on the horizon, say good eve to the sun a mystical aura, spread in a cloud of romantic charms, enticed me to touch the smiling face, as a breeze caressed the lake floating aura, float me up to hang over darkest lake to see moon's face -- a floating twin in movement I saw, as a companion soul in my praying corner of hope, beckoning me to fly with the breeze, a white feathered fairy of angelic grace and like the moon I shall sit and hope with your hope that with breezed wings of life I should thus feather your flight a new-born bird, freedom gained in the sky cradling arms of mother sky, swimming with happy butterfly strokes as a lingering kiss toward the moon and as one thought lifts high entwined with thoughts of another tender is the night's light upon all that love below ~ ~ ~ Thanks a huge bunch, Karilea for first agreeing to take part in this most enjoyable duet and then writing such wonderful poetry making me feel honoured.... The poet is you and the duet was a great happy event... [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 09-14-2000).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You guys did make such beautifully entwined thoughts...and lovely imagery, a joy to read. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Yes.....Yes!! A meeting of great writing poetic talent. How I love this poem and the joining of 2 voices to form the duet. Great job!!  Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
ohhhh.. I see how it is now - not only do you two weigh in against me so effectively on your own, but you gang up on me and really finish me off with the ol' one-two punch. This is a wonderful poem, you two. I was transported to the lake in the eve, saw everything from the shore, and the air, and the moon. Great collaboration! I really enjoyed this poem. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Sunshine and Sudhir the perfect match, this was absolutely beautiful. A teaming of two dazzling talents that produced a poem that is nothing short of poetic perfection. This is the hour when the mysteries emerge A strangeness so hard to reflect A moment so moving goes straight to your heart" JOy divison |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sudhir and Karilea, can't think of more lustrous poets to combine their talents into this beautiful work Exquisite Liz [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 09-14-2000).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thanks are due to Sudhir for his request, and for giving me such a wonderful jumping off place to start. Someday we are all going to say we knew him when... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I think we will all be saying we knew you both "when"....such a lovely duet and definitely among the tops in the pairs arena. Great imagery and wonderful flow throughout the whole piece.  |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sunshine and Sudhir, this piece will definitely be entwined in my thoughts for some time to come. Beautiful. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sudhir is going to be so pleased to see that so many have come to read his work...I am so thrilled that he asked me to inter-weave... thank you... |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Wonderful work by you two!!! I love it Like Nike says.....just duet!  |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Great weaving from two of the finest!!! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent. . . a true meeting of poetic minds. . . Sunshine, we may indeed say that we all knew Sudhir when. . . but I have a feeling we're going to be saying that about you too!!! Well done by both of you!! ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Both of your talents shine through on this one. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
What a beautiful tapestry two talents have woven!!! This is lovely! |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautiful collaboration Sudhir and Karilea! Wow! Your words compliment each others wonderfully, combining to flow into this exquisite verse. Excellent writing to you both! Best wishes, /Kit |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Wow you two, what beauty your collective minds have given us with this. Simply awesome!!! Bonnie |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Such beauty you have penned here...wow you two...when can we expect more? |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
You both certainly have interwined your talents for a beautiful poem. Enjoyed muchly!!! ...chanson~ Music, tonal clear & pure, Caresses the harshest of curves. -Song of Gesture |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
OMG, so many beautful responses... so honoured and touched, I am.... Firstly thanks a million to Karilea who agreed to do this duet... enjoyed every moment of it, and still am enjoying it... Martie, Thank you so much... imagery expert saying these words... WOW Sunny1, Thanks for your lovely response... O Sir Sailorman, that was not the idea, but am glad that you saw it all... thanks a huge deal... Ah, Lustrous Liz, ain't it beautiful herself visiting ... thanks for coming by...Mark, Thank you so much, my friend.... O Kethry, your words ... no words can be enough to thank you... Karilea, I am, indeed I am so much pleased... almost feeling breathless... Thanks for agreeing to be part of this duet... without one hand there's no way one can clap... O Sir Balladeer, so many thanks... you honour me by coming by.... Butterflies~, what a lovely way to say... Thank you O Sir Sven, Thank so much....so very much... Eloise, Thank you suthern, It is a privilege to see your name in this thread.... than you Kit, How could I ever thank you for your lovely response... Bonnie, Thanks a lot... Paula, soon, I hope soon.... thank you Chanson... Thanks so much for coming by.... Oh Gosh, Am I tired..... never... you people are amazing... thanks to you all.... Regards to all, Sudhir. |
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