Open Poetry #9 |
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Whispers |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
WHISPERS Whilst breeze of autum tickles amber leaf Heavenly clouds soar gracefully Illusions of past soon are forgotten Singing sparrows wings in flutter Petals of rosebush dance unto dewkissed ground Expectations of tomorrow new beginnings to be found Release the shackles of thy past So whispers aching heart... at last [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 09-14-2000).] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Oh, Coco....this is truly wonderful!!! I love the thought, and I love the delicate whisper.. Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
WOW coco~ What a wonderful acrostic....well done these are my favourite and I haven't done one in ages mmmm I'll have to now I think ![]() Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Dani~ What a mesmerizing word is whisper. A sigh waiting for a place to happen ... a happening that takes place within the whispers of your well-done acrostic. I enjoyed this. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
These are beautifully penned words... most excellent work, coco~ regards, sudhir |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lovely especially the last two lines...James Listen..do you want to know a secret. Let me whisper in your ear say the words you long to hear.. I'm in Love with you...the Beatles |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"Release the shackles of thy past So whispers aching heart... at last" Yes, the past can shackle the heart like nothing else, and you have expressed this sooo superbly! What a lovely verse you've shared...thank you! ** James, one of my favorite Beatles' songs ~ ![]() ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Beautifully penned and loved the "whispers" in this one. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
SUNNY1..Ursoo sweet thank you TRACI66..nice2cU once again ![]() MARGE..hugz2U special lady friend SUDHIR..respected1 your words mean much JAMES..that tune is a sweet1 CLAIRE..smiles2U talented poet of rhyme MARK..your comments are deeply appreciated Thank you ALL for your kind replies ![]() ![]() [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 09-14-2000).] |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I just want to add my kudos - to those above - Even were this not an excellent Acrostic - I'd love it for its subject and the way you handled it. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Coco oh how I love coming across anything by you...you always touch something deep inside with just the power of your words...thank you |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
CocoBaci a haunting and beautiful poem perfectly whispered. ![]() This is the hour when the mysteries emerge A strangeness so hard to reflect A moment so moving goes straight to your heart" JOy divison |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
wow - great acrostic - today must be acrostic day |
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Greeneyes![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
beautiful....*S* Greeneyes |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
WILFRED...I've read some of your poetry and I am touched that you read thru this one and comment they way you have. PAULA.. ![]() ![]() BRIAN.. nice 2cU stop by and I am delighted you left me word of your impression of this rhyme LngJhn.. It means alot 2 me that you peaked inside to read this rhyme Greeneyes.. From 1greeneyes2another I thank you for taking time to comment |
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Auguste![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Coco, This is just so very lovely...so beautifully written... ![]() Michael Proust- "Love is space and time measured by the heart" |
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