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Wilfred Yeats
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0 posted 2000-09-14 12:43 PM



Cobalt blue with fluffy white tines
Billowing plumes of cirrus splendor
Forms and shapes to lay back and wonder

Or the sky at sunrise, pale dark hues
Violet and orange, soften to blues
They raise my conscious mind like tea
Confirm my God belief you see

Give me solace for lack of love home
Greek goddess, brings end to night's comb
Her dawn curtain across heaven spreading
Warming my heart, my life renewing.

Coruscating, your eyes in my soul
I sit in wonder, gazing at the sky's bowl


© Copyright 2000 Wilfred Yeats - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-09-14 04:41 AM


Wilfred~
What lovely horizons of the heart you flung
across the evening.
Very nicely done.

Something majestic in the power of His work,
isn't there ?
~*Marge*~


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Sudhir Iyer
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2 posted 2000-09-14 05:39 AM


Wilfred,
This is a fine poem you have penned...

regards,
sudhir
P.S. I missed the first line though... is it the skyline  

Kethry
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3 posted 2000-09-14 05:50 AM


Wilfred,
I have no idea what "cirrus" is but it sounds splendiferous. Running to my dictionary now. Accolades to you.
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

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4 posted 2000-09-14 05:52 AM


I was right it is a splendiferous word thanks for introducing me to it. Now all I have to do is find a way to use it in poem.
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Irish Rose
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5 posted 2000-09-14 07:13 AM


I was intrigued by the word "cirrus" also. I thought of the ATM.  
I loved the vocabulary in this one and the tender words used.

Kathleen


Nan
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6 posted 2000-09-14 07:34 AM


I love dawn too, Wil... Your rendition of it is indeed splendiferous -- I have only this to say...


Night's pallid hush ascends with gentle Grace.
Nocturnal fauna nestles back in ground.
Precursive solar tendrils peer around
Through tatted eyelets in morn's tree-top lace.

Faint blushing tiers of pink and crimson hue
Unfold soft wisps of streaming cirrus cloud.
The meadow's haze of gossamer a shroud,
As crystal sheaths submit to glist'ning dew

And cautious sunbeams flicker on the rise.
Clenched petals stretch to welcome dawning's rays,
A valiant beacon bursts forth in full blaze.
The Morning Star now masked by azure skies -

'Til breath of life, that brief eternity
God's sacred Realm embraces only me.

Elizabeth Santos
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7 posted 2000-09-14 07:58 AM


Sorry, I can't compete with Nan when she unleashes her poetic tendrils.
But I can tell how lovely your sonnet is . You have both portrayed a wonderful, beautiful feeling
Liz

Martie
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8 posted 2000-09-14 10:40 AM


Bill--What a splendid view you have painted with your words...there is so much beauty in the sky to inspire and you have inspired me with the way you see it...thank you.



Wilfred Yeats
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9 posted 2000-09-14 10:59 AM


Marge-

His world can always renew my joy in life - Thank You

Sudhir-

I was thinking 'tines' as in a comb or fork - clouds can take so many different shapes -and it 'fit' with my Greek Goddess line - thank you ~S~

Kethry & Irish Rose-

I considered 'cumulo nimbus' but it didn't fit -LOL but there are many cloud names one can use - ~S~ Thank you

Nan -

To get a sonnet in reply - just blows me away -and such a beautiful one as well - My very humble thanks ~big broad smile~

Liz-

Such a reply as Nan's is never required - and I'm extremely grateful - but one thing is certain - you could do whatever you set your mind to and I'll be happy to read and enjoy whatever you write, whereever you post it. Thank you

Wilfred Yeats
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10 posted 2000-09-14 12:13 PM


Martie-

Missed your Reply while i responded to the others - sorry - I am glad I could offer some inspiration to you  

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11 posted 2000-09-14 12:54 PM


beautiful words, with a wonderful feeling....cirrus clouds are splendid arent
they....enjoyed...*S*

LC

Wilfred Yeats
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12 posted 2000-09-14 05:44 PM


Green Eyes-

clouds in sunrise - clouds in sunsets = give them the color - that fill me with wonder - YES  - thank you  

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