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i won't go back
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i won't go back |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! 
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The summer moon says goodbye to us the fall winds come blowing up the dust chills of winter fill the air i remember reluctantly the faded tears by your side for all of those years spaces of time filled with so much doubt i won't go back to fighting again i won't go back to playing that game i won't go back... so don't ask me to.. i won't go back baby this time we're through.. i've come to tell you i've figured it out got no excuses or reasons to give time heals and we shall live hanging on memories never did any good i just let go kind of like you knew i would and i'm not saying i have the right to be forgiven and i'm not saying i would do it different if i could everyone has a pocketful of broken dreams promises lost in the ashes of a burned down love scene and i won't go back to fighting again i won't go back to playing that game i won't go back... so please don't ask me to.. i won't go back baby..this time we're through.. and we were playing our parts both so well all the worlds a stage till we fell, we fell fell down so hard hit the bottom left a bump on our head then it all came in clear... did you finally look through my eyes? see what i was trying to say all along? when you always thought i was wrong and i was right..... right.... all... along... it felt so right sometimes... but it was so very wrong... we had no right to hold on... we were fooling ourselves thinking it would be forever forever died... with goodbye... it was no good... you knew it would... now i just let go... and i wanted you to know... all i really needed was to just be happy in your arms it wasn't meant to be... now i will find what i need it will come to me no need to look i believe in destiny the magnetism of the universe will send a soul to me and to you this i am sure happy you will be i really hope it finds you dear because it isn't with me... and i won't go back to fighting again i won't go back to playing that game i won't go back... so please don't ask me to.. i won't go back baby..this time we're through.. and we were playing our parts both so well all the worlds a stage till we fell, we fell fell down so hard hit the bottom left a bump on our head then it all came in clear... did you finally look through my eyes? see what i was trying to say all along? when you always thought i was wrong and i was right..... right.... all... along... Julie :) |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
JulieAnn, This is a masterpiece in expressional poetry... what a way to go about it... Absolutely loved the read... very powerful... you really have a great ability to write, the flair and the touch to the art is unmistakable... Keep writing... for my appetite has just increased to feed these hungry eyes... and I like the repeating stanzas... Regards, sudhir |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wow JulieAnn! You must have had a melody in mind while you were writing this ... this is definately a song, and an excellent one at that! Loved this, really expressive, nicely done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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English Rose Member
since 2000-08-20
Posts 211Berkshire, England |
An excellent read JulieAnn |
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Jaysun C Member
since 2000-07-20
Posts 56 |
Ouch! just loosing someone, that one kind of hurts |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I want to call this "Requiem to a ruined love" I so appreciate the strength I hear in your poems, and you are so wonderfully expressive. catalinamoon |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
What wonderful thoughts you have here, Julie. "Everyone has a pocketful of broken dreams..." How true is that!!! This is excellent writing.... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
VERY POWERFUL You have been growing more with each post and this one shows it all. You have such a wonderful way of speaking truth from your heart and now I am going back for a second read. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Julie Ann, Excellent poen wonderful writing. But I would believe it more if it didn't take so long to say. *L* Sy |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Sud...thank you you are too kind I am glad you liked it!!! Kit..,tahnx for reading and replying.... glad you liked it and I did sort of have melody in mind however i do not write music...but I have a friend who does!!! English rose...thnak you for your kind reply...  Jayson....yes but itme does heal....thank you for reading... Cat....thank you I am glad you liked it an di do like the name you thought of for this.... Balladeer...i am graced with your presence once agian and what an honor it is  ....thank you so much I am glad you liked it!! Mark...you have made my day I am glad oyu liked it...you might want to check out my post in dark passions...thereis only one..I think you might like it...thank you fro reading... Seymour...though there is a little real life story to this it is mostly fictional...meant to be a song..i actually have someone working on the music behind it...thank you for reading an dreplying....I am gald you liked it... Julie :) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Loved the message in this poem...especially.. "every one has a pocketful of broken dreams. promises lost in the ashes of a burned down love scene." "all I really needed was to just be happy in your arms." "I believe in destiny the magnetism of the universe will send a soul to me." Very creative writing...James |
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