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Equinox (written with brian madden)
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Equinox (written with brian madden) |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia 
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I had a fistful of broken sunsets and a memory like deja-vu liquidity selling my dreams in exchange for familiarity stability though I knew that stars shone stark against vast night I settled for flickering streetlamps and muted horizons But celestial prophecy swallowed me and I saw you in supernova clarity your radiance blistered my soul, and all I wanted was for you to consume me solar-storm-tidal-wave universal conjunction my love for you, defies the laws of existence. I am pondering with Darwin my instincts, you know apes never drank the raptures of female glory, just raw hinds to the jungle wind, but this, the chemicals and intoxication flowering and erupting in you my pantheist princess, the echoes of the great laurels the romantics are woken from deep within. I am the crazed fawn, the Prozac kiss that shimmers upon your lips, that fragile treasure sheltered in sequential shades. In this concave looking glass, a blurred tunnel ignites, you are the clarity through the haze. We consist and exist as astronomical evolution equinox precision past revealed, but no future to behold for we are suspended in time as ageless devotion leaving heaven and earth to myth we alone are creation of a higher intent. We are the alpha star and the omega, merging in solar union, my sea of tranquillity ripples with your dynamic sigh, you are the Jupiter flame in supernova across a crystalline lake, in the vacuum of luscious bliss we are bound. < !signature--> "Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos [This message has been edited by poutprincess (edited 09-13-2000).] |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
This is kind of dreamy...I liked it...great work to both of you...  Julie :) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Very, very nice teamwork...love the "pantheist princess" (brian?) a hang-glider of a poem, through space and time...I liked the prozac kiss too...not really sure of the implications, but I liked it...LOL great job, and pout, it's comin' round to my favorite times of the year...e me some time, could love to hear of your traditions... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Much applause here... Cheers to a pair of wonderful poets... ABSOLUTELY GREAT WORK... regards, sudhir |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderfully done you two! |
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Jaysun C Member
since 2000-07-20
Posts 56 |
this poem sets my mind free to swim in the heavens. such relaxing dreamy poetry is what I like, I only wish i could make thi poem my reality =)(= |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
JulieAnn: thank you! yes,it is dreamy,and dreamy is such a nice place to settle in! serenity: thats right, that was Brian! thank you so much for enjoying, and thank you for inviting me to email you, i will be doing that soon...would love to talk about traditions with you! sudhir: thank you so much, means alot to me to have you read and leave such a lovely comment! Martie: thank you very much! Jaysun: oh, just keep that heart open and surely this poem can become your reality! thank you!  Dawn< !signature-->"Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos [This message has been edited by poutprincess (edited 09-13-2000).] |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~OH..This is very intense...It has left me wanting something or someone..Dont quite know yet....You two are truly a magnificent pair!! TERRIFIC WRITTING!!!~ ps....Please do more duets...*smile* ~Cherie~ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Julie Ann, yes Dreamy is good and Pout's words have shone upon my little dark corner and inspired my tender side. THanks for your wonderful reply. serenity, yippe guilty of over use of metaphor as usual. thanks for your wonderful words.Sudhir, THank you my friend, I always look forward to your comments and am grateful for the time you take to read and reply. Martie, thank you Jaysun C, that heaven is out there my friend, and one day I am sure it will be real. THank you. Beth, Thanks for your wonderful reply, I hope you find what you are looking for. And a special nod to Dawn, who took me to new heights with this poem, it was pleasure working with such an excellent poet and if Dawn permits I would love to work with her again. This is the hour when the mysteries emerge A strangeness so hard to reflect A moment so moving goes straight to your heart" JOy divison |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
I don't know if any of you recognize me, but I have been missing from action for quite some time now. This is partially due to a crappy computer, but most credit goes to a horrible case of writer's block. The point being, this poem has left my head spinning with solar systems and "a fist full of broken sunsets". (I love that line!!!) I agree with Beth, please do more work together; you make such a wonderful team. I'm feeling quite inspired & I might be scribbling lines for later poems in between orders at work! Beautiful poem you two. .*.*.*.Krissie.*.*.*. I'm sorry for telling u love was unnecessary... making you lose ur way I'm sure I'll be as sad as u feel ~Touch and Go |
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