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Say Good-bye and Leave
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Say Good-bye and Leave |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
As I watch you pack your bags I try to hold back the tears. How can you change your mind after all of these years? I can't hold you back now, but I won't help you go. And if you walk out of that door, there's something you should know... I won't miss you when you're gone. I won't cry in my pillow at night. I may even forget your face the second you are out of sight. I'll take your pictures off my wall and I won't ever speak your name. I won't beat myself up over this 'cause I know you're the one to blame. If I see you on the street one day I won't even bat an eye. And I hope you won't be looking for tears because these eyes will be dry. I refuse to play the bitter ex though I know that you would like me to. Life is too short to play those games. I just have too much else to do... So, could you pack a little faster please? I have somewhere I should be. Just move on, the show is over, there is nothing left here to see. --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Tennessee Angel, life goes on my friend. . . but sometimes, it's not as easy as we want it to be. . . Powerful poem. . . ------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Very well written. It only hurts for a little while. Of course that's easier said than done. |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
i do commend you for standing strong! but make sure that your strength isnt just another form of repression! this was a great poem...very much enjoyed! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
TA* Your strength in this piece is awesome...yes Sven is right things aren't always this easy but I think this is the way everyone wishes it could be.....just OVER and nothing else~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
TennesseeAngel~ Oh, hon ... glad to see you've gone to the meadow !  Softly smiling at your strength ... take care of YOU ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Tennessee Angel, This was powerful and so full of strength. So proud of you for posting this and getting those feelings out. It is never an easy time, but sometimes it is best for all. Take care. Great writing. Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi Angel, This poem has harsh connotations but very tenderly written, at least to me. Very well done, and I'm glad that I made it by. |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
Nice. Nothing like a strong display of will. Great poem. |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Amen!!! I always say if they want to go why beg them to stay??? there is more fish in the sea......let him pack his bags and be on his way!!! Julie :) |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Thank you all for the nice compliments!! Just wanted everyone to know that this is purely a work of fiction, as are most of my pieces. Though I am not currently in a break up this is how I handled my last one. --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Very nice, if only it was that easy. I liked this very much, and I feel stronger just for reading it! Jenn E |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn |
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