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Tennessee Angel
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Tennessee

0 posted 2000-08-02 10:53 PM


As I watch you pack your bags
I try to hold back the tears.
How can you change your mind
after all of these years?

I can't hold you back now,
but I won't help you go.
And if you walk out of that door,
there's something you should know...

I won't miss you when you're gone.
I won't cry in my pillow at night.
I may even forget your face
the second you are out of sight.

I'll take your pictures off my wall
and I won't ever speak your name.
I won't beat myself up over this
'cause I know you're the one to blame.

If I see you on the street one day
I won't even bat an eye.
And I hope you won't be looking for tears
because these eyes will be dry.

I refuse to play the bitter ex
though I know that you would like me to.
Life is too short to play those games.
I just have too much else to do...

So, could you pack a little faster please?
I have somewhere I should be.
Just move on, the show is over,
there is nothing left here to see.


--You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.--

© Copyright 2000 Stacy - All Rights Reserved
Sven
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1 posted 2000-08-02 10:57 PM


Tennessee Angel,
                life goes on my friend. . . but sometimes, it's not as easy as we want it to be. . .

Powerful poem. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Eloise
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2 posted 2000-08-02 11:01 PM


Very well written.  It only hurts for a little while.  Of course that's easier said than done.  
poutprincess
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since 2000-07-06
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Perth, Western Australia, Australia
3 posted 2000-08-02 11:03 PM


i do commend you for standing strong! but make sure that your strength isnt just another form of repression! this was a great poem...very much enjoyed!
Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
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Michigan
4 posted 2000-08-02 11:06 PM


TA* Your strength in this piece is
awesome...yes Sven is right things aren't
always this easy but I think this is the way
everyone wishes it could be.....just OVER
and nothing else~

Marge Tindal
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Florida's Foreverly Shores
5 posted 2000-08-02 11:21 PM


TennesseeAngel~
Oh, hon ... glad to see you've
gone to the meadow !  

Softly smiling at your strength ...
take care of YOU !
Love ya'
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
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Lansing, MI USA
6 posted 2000-08-03 06:12 PM


Tennessee Angel,

This was powerful and so full of strength.  So proud of you for posting this and getting those feelings out.  It is never an easy time, but sometimes it is best for all.  Take care.  Great writing.  

Lone Wolf


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11
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highways, & byways, for now
7 posted 2000-08-03 06:16 PM


Hi Angel,
This poem has harsh connotations but very tenderly written, at least to me. Very well done, and I'm glad that I made it by.

Effigy
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since 2000-04-11
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disbelief
8 posted 2000-08-03 06:29 PM


Nice. Nothing like a strong display of will. Great poem.
JulieAnn
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Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!!
9 posted 2000-08-03 07:06 PM


Amen!!! I always say if they want to go why beg them to stay??? there is more fish in the sea......let him pack his bags and be on his way!!!  

Julie :)



Tennessee Angel
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Tennessee
10 posted 2000-08-03 11:19 PM


Thank you all for the nice compliments!!  Just wanted everyone to know that this is purely a work of fiction, as are most of my pieces.  Though I am not currently in a break up this is how I handled my last one.  

--You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.--

Jenn E
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since 2000-08-02
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Kelowna, BC, Canada
11 posted 2000-08-03 11:23 PM


Very nice, if only it was that easy. I liked this very much, and I feel stronger just for reading it!

Jenn E

passing shadows
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displaced
12 posted 2004-05-02 07:59 PM


damn
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