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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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This day - so special - transcendent Is it the transfer of summer? The sun is covered in haze The humidity oppressive yet I am floating cool and serene My thoughts miles away in flowered fields The harsh actuality of my surroundings Glazed with the greater reality Of your words suspended above my eyes Buttercups, Queen Anne's lace, and Heather No box, no instrument here and still Celestial music flows through the grasses Winds itself upon the zephyrs Singing your song, soaring my kite Carrying me above the clouds Their downy feel- like rabbit fur Caresses my skin with your thoughts A counterpoint made in heaven A fugue and toccata going beyond Mere mortal concept layered In fervent declarations Breath heavy with meaning Moans of import too sweet And so I dissolve in crystal shards Like sugar glaze as you seep Into my pores, a venous transfer Straight to my heart What magic have you wrought Upon my soul that I fall so willingly Into the depths of your being? |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill--sounds like you have been sipping from the magic that cupid brews up on hot humid days...this is very beautiful! [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 09-13-2000).] |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Lovely poetic expression... Thank you for sharing...  Coco |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Cupid - with his bow and arrows - needs more target practice - I'm getting grazed, but not pierced- - but the feeling is the same -perhaps I missed one entering unseen - Thanks Martie[This message has been edited by Wilfred Yeats (edited 09-13-2000).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
So soft and tender a love song, with many wonderful phrases, written by one who's been in love, and falling in love again. This time it's much much sweeter. This is very beautiful, as usual Liz |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Liz - your perceptive words tell me you really read my words - and I thank you for your insight - Thank you |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
What magic have you wrought Upon my soul that I fall so willingly Into the depths of your being? your words do speak like no other, I have read this twice now, and loved it, felt it both times....*S* Greeneyes~ |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Wilfred - a great read - complex, but flowing - the thread of the poem is consistent. I like the part about the venous transfusion straight to the heart - great metaphor for the way love can drive in from a thousand different directions. One piece of advice though - even though it may kill you to say it, tell her you love her cat. Later, when she isn't watching you real close, you can give kitty the boot - lol. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
quote: the essence of the poem... in the above lines... excellent stanza! ~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a sincere apology and some decent poetry ~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Bill, If a piece of writing transports me to another place, another reality, an enchantment has occurred. I found this poem of yours enchanting. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Green Eyes- thank you - there's magic in your eyes too - I'm glad I could write something - that touched you LJ- Kill me? I like cats (love dogs more - but I enjoy cats ~S~ thank you.Doreen - Thank you very much - I keep trying Claire- I must say you enchant me as well - I will never fail to read you - thank you |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh Bill...another story that leaves me aching and longing...how do you write my heart so often? |
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Honey Bunch Member
since 2000-08-08
Posts 99South Africa |
"What magic have you wrought Upon my soul that I fall so willingly Into the depths of your being?" Ahh! The magic of love. Just visiting from the Corner Pub where I occasionally hang out and was so pleased to find such wonderful words from you. Helen |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
CocoBaci- I'm sorry I "missed" you on my last reply - thank you for your kind words Paula - If I'm writing the words you like - then the poet in you is responding to her muse Honey Bunch- Thank you for your sweet reply - I still want to read your poetry here |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent writing, Wilfred. Interesting, isn't it, how our minds can place us in environments so far removed from actuality? Love will do that to one......thank you. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Like my signature - I should simply record a reply - to you I can post on demand: "you are too kind- my humble thanks" let me add this time: Yes - love does that |
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